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 Jan 2 2006, 09:22 PM
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he picked her up from her house, rang the doorbell, told her she looked beautiful, and opened the car door for her . he held her hand tightly, gave her quick kisses on her cheek at red lights, and smiled at her endlessly with twinkles in his eye . he took her to the finest resturant, remembering her favorite booth at the coziest corner of the place . he fed her and cuddled with her and wouldnt sit farther than an inch away from her . he took her to the beach and gave her a piggy back ride . he built sand castles with her and dug holes with her and made her laugh until tears came out of her eyes . he held her tightly as they looked up at the stars . he pointed out the star he had named after her 2 years ago . the star was once so bright, now it shone dimly in the sky; almost hidden by clouds . he kissed her forehead and her ears and her neck . and then he kissed her lips . and he let the blissful kiss go on until eternity seemed to fade . he got lost in emotions that his heart couldnt speak . and when their sweet kiss ended, he could feel a tear escape from his eyes . he let that tear full of memory and love linger on his cheeks for just a second, before he wiped it from his face . and then he leaned in close to her, holding her in his arms as if he never wanted to let her go and whispered three words into her ear .
let's break up . |
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Jan 2 2006, 09:27 PM
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 Bay Area YadadaDiiiig. Group: Official Member Posts: 4,249 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 103,202 |
QUOTE(lidoxangie @ Jan 2 2006, 7:22 PM) go on until eternity seemed to fade .  I really really like that line. I like all the things they used to do together. Its so sweet. I really like it. |
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Jan 2 2006, 09:45 PM
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ooo boy
'lets break up?' dang but that was nice 
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Jan 3 2006, 04:46 AM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
Oh man....lol.
That ending made my eyes go like this: 0.0 But it made the story...memorable. I liked it very much. Thanks for sharing :) |
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Jan 9 2006, 02:11 AM
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 I'd rather make mistakes than break. Group: Member Posts: 121 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 117,869 |
Awwwww. That was so sweet I think I got a toothache.
How I wished something like that could happen to me. Except hopefully I wouldn't be dying because that seems to be what's happening here to the girl. |
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Jan 9 2006, 11:23 AM
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 I'll be your Rock N Roll Queen Group: Member Posts: 68 Joined: Dec 2005 Member No: 324,951 |
That is really a surprise ending
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Jan 10 2006, 09:43 PM
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 <3 Group: Member Posts: 3,657 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 64,493 |
awww that was so sad.
but a really good story |
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Jan 10 2006, 09:44 PM
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 Call me C.Annie Group: Member Posts: 366 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 115,994 |
DANG! I never expected that ending. But thats a good thing :) I love suprise and twisted endings. Awesome job. It was a great story.
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Jul 7 2006, 10:45 AM
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 fifteen...there's still time for you... Group: Member Posts: 59 Joined: Jul 2006 Member No: 433,028 |
awwww that's so sad! we all know what we thought those three words were going to be...
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