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Feb 23 2009, 07:01 PM
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![]() Mel Blanc was allergic to carrots. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Designer Posts: 6,371 Joined: Aug 2008 Member No: 676,291 |
I recently made a graphic and figured I'd get some c&c on it. I think the only thing I don't like about it is the text.
![]() UPDATE: ![]() UPDATE #2: ![]() UPDATE #3: ![]() UPDATE #4: ![]() |
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Feb 23 2009, 07:06 PM
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show me a garden thats bursting to life ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 12,303 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 115,987 |
Dude, that's 9000 brushes too many. |
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Feb 23 2009, 07:09 PM
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![]() Senior Member ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 2,435 Joined: Feb 2007 Member No: 506,205 |
Yeah, I was going to say it reminds me of the preview images on the brush sites I used to go to when I first started. If you lessened the number of brushes and maybe added color and shadow/glow to make it more realistic, it might be better.
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Feb 23 2009, 07:53 PM
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![]() Tick tock, Bill ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Administrator Posts: 8,764 Joined: Dec 2005 Member No: 333,948 |
I like the techie thing you're trying to do, you've just overdone it with such varying brush styles. I'd stick to one or two styles, maybe three if it's subtle and stick with the change of opacity and shades of gray/black/white. Maybe even toss in a little red.
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Feb 23 2009, 07:58 PM
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![]() Mel Blanc was allergic to carrots. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Designer Posts: 6,371 Joined: Aug 2008 Member No: 676,291 |
Ok, I updated. I tried to not use to many brushes.
Thanks for the feedback. :) |
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Feb 23 2009, 08:01 PM
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![]() /人◕‿‿◕人\ ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Member Posts: 8,283 Joined: Dec 2007 Member No: 602,927 |
I like it, but I'm not feeling the font. The first font you used might look good.
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Feb 23 2009, 08:11 PM
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![]() Mel Blanc was allergic to carrots. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Designer Posts: 6,371 Joined: Aug 2008 Member No: 676,291 |
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Feb 23 2009, 08:15 PM
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![]() Tick tock, Bill ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Administrator Posts: 8,764 Joined: Dec 2005 Member No: 333,948 |
Second update is much better. :)
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Feb 23 2009, 08:17 PM
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![]() Mel Blanc was allergic to carrots. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Designer Posts: 6,371 Joined: Aug 2008 Member No: 676,291 |
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Feb 23 2009, 08:24 PM
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![]() Sex, Blood, & RocknRoll ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: People Staff Posts: 5,305 Joined: Nov 2007 Member No: 596,480 |
Nice updates. I am not going to lie the first was really bad, but the 2 after are pretty good.
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Feb 23 2009, 08:40 PM
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![]() Mel Blanc was allergic to carrots. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Designer Posts: 6,371 Joined: Aug 2008 Member No: 676,291 |
^haha, thanks.
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Feb 23 2009, 08:46 PM
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show me a garden thats bursting to life ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 12,303 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 115,987 |
Noootttt bad!
The font still seems a little out of place though. Under the middle line that goes like O-----o, delete the little cubes under neath and space your font out under there. Adjust the kerning to make large spaces between each character and then I'd think it'd look awesome. |
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Feb 23 2009, 08:55 PM
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![]() Mel Blanc was allergic to carrots. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Designer Posts: 6,371 Joined: Aug 2008 Member No: 676,291 |
Noootttt bad! The font still seems a little out of place though. Under the middle line that goes like O-----o, delete the little cubes under neath and space your font out under there. Adjust the kerning to make large spaces between each character and then I'd think it'd look awesome. Thanks. |
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Feb 23 2009, 08:59 PM
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![]() Mel Blanc was allergic to carrots. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Designer Posts: 6,371 Joined: Aug 2008 Member No: 676,291 |
Total double post. :P
Anyways, I tried to do what you said but I'm not sure if it worked out right, I think. What do you think? |
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Feb 23 2009, 09:02 PM
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![]() Sex, Blood, & RocknRoll ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: People Staff Posts: 5,305 Joined: Nov 2007 Member No: 596,480 |
looks better to me. Maybe move the words left a little more. It bugs me how the s is touching the line. =P
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Feb 23 2009, 09:07 PM
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![]() Mel Blanc was allergic to carrots. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Designer Posts: 6,371 Joined: Aug 2008 Member No: 676,291 |
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Feb 23 2009, 09:07 PM
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![]() Senior Member ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 1,815 Joined: Jun 2006 Member No: 423,396 |
Update #3 does look more pleasing to the eye than the first one. But it still looks like pure brushwork. :\
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Feb 23 2009, 09:14 PM
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![]() Mel Blanc was allergic to carrots. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Designer Posts: 6,371 Joined: Aug 2008 Member No: 676,291 |
Ok, I moved the text a little to the left.
In response to Mark's post, most of it is brushes but I made the tiles and the lines in the background and the little spheres/squares. |
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Feb 23 2009, 10:18 PM
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![]() Senior Member ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 2,435 Joined: Feb 2007 Member No: 506,205 |
Woah, definate improvement. I still think it could use a little color somewhere...maybe that's just me.
Just curious, what's the difference between #3 and #4? |
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Feb 23 2009, 10:19 PM
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![]() poison ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Member Posts: 4,806 Joined: Mar 2008 Member No: 629,020 |
if i were you i would possibly try adding a red orb and have it set on lighten or screen
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Feb 23 2009, 10:57 PM
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![]() Senior Member ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Administrator Posts: 8,629 Joined: Jan 2007 Member No: 498,468 |
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Feb 23 2009, 11:10 PM
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show me a garden thats bursting to life ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 12,303 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 115,987 |
Why is everyone going to the left?
I think if it was spaced up to the little square on the right, with the font made a wee bit smaller, maybe in all Caps and with a smaller shadow it'd be purty schnazzy. |
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Feb 23 2009, 11:12 PM
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![]() Senior Member ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Designer Posts: 5,880 Joined: Nov 2007 Member No: 593,382 |
hmmm...It just looks like you found a million brushes and then added some text and to top it all off. gave the text a drop shadow. If you give text or anything a drop shadow, center it directly under. Drop shadows like the one you have is very 90's/2002.
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Feb 24 2009, 11:26 PM
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![]() ٩(●̮̮̃•̃)۶ ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Member Posts: 1,403 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 12,173 |
Wow, big improvement from your first one. Though, I don't think you had that many brushes...just that they shouldn't overlap too much. Don't really prefer the circles with the drop shadow, or the circles at all. Anyway, you should look into new fonts too. Some of these would would fit your graphic better- http://www.dafont.com/theme.php?cat=303&am...&classt=pop
This one seems cool: http://www.dafont.com/hybrid.font?nb_ppp=50 Then you can take out your other dots. Anyway, not bad. Is your bg one brush, lots of brushes, or entirely designed by you? |
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Feb 25 2009, 10:00 PM
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![]() Mel Blanc was allergic to carrots. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Designer Posts: 6,371 Joined: Aug 2008 Member No: 676,291 |
Thanks for the feedback.
Well, the background is some brushes but a lot of the lines and the spheres/squares/tiles were made by me. |
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Feb 26 2009, 01:20 PM
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Senior Member ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Human Posts: 525 Joined: Nov 2008 Member No: 695,913 |
good stuff i like how it looks updated now . .
Stay Up -1- Subliminal |
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Feb 26 2009, 10:14 PM
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![]() 사랑해 ~ 我愛你 ♥ ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Design Staff Posts: 825 Joined: Jan 2007 Member No: 492,587 |
the last few definitely improved from the first one (: honestly, the font still sticks out a little much for me, i'd use a lighter version of the font you're using so that it fits in a little more with the image.
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