Her Fairy tale |
 Jan 22 2005, 05:18 PM
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When you said you loved her
She believed you although She didn’t have reason too She was just a girl Wanting the fairy tale and Now she has closed the book. It didn’t end with “happily ever after” She should have known it wouldn’t For there was never a “once upon a time.” Her story was a sham There was no wicked stepmother There was no villain The hero was a fake And her prince charming Would not be Kissing her back to life She poisoned the apple And bit it on her own accord Then lay in a glass coffin Built by her own hands And the little seven men Did not attend her funeral There was no kingdom for this story Only that of her own mind The world in which she lives Won’t allow such fantasy although The anecdotes live well in Children’s books, movies and minds There is no patience for those who dream So for now, there can only be The End |
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Jan 22 2005, 05:37 PM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
awesome. so sweet yet it's bitter. i loved how you related it to a fairy tale and this line stuck out to me in particular:
QUOTE It didn’t end with “happily ever after” She should have known it wouldn’t For there was never a “once upon a time.” that was awesome! keep it up! |
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Jan 22 2005, 07:10 PM
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 LunchboxXx Group: Member Posts: 1,789 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,810 |
the line mensioned above is pretty badass. reminds me of some Rasputina. thumbs up
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Jan 22 2005, 09:55 PM
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 i am a liar Group: Member Posts: 69 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 77,216 |
that was thoroughly, amazingly awesome.
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Jan 22 2005, 10:05 PM
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the only advective that suits this is 'amazing.' you are very talented, don't ever stop writing.
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Jan 23 2005, 03:45 AM
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thats great. i really like the whole concept and the way it was written. awesome work.
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Jan 23 2005, 12:49 PM
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 WANTED..for sexyness Group: Member Posts: 1,050 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 77,290 |
QUOTE awesome. so sweet yet it's bitter. i loved how you related it to a fairy tale and this line stuck out to me in particular:
It didn’t end with “happily ever after” She should have known it wouldn’t For there was never a “once upon a time.” that was awesome! keep it up! |
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Jan 23 2005, 06:06 PM
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 High Voltage!∞ Group: Official Member Posts: 4,728 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 29,157 |
I love it. I love the whole idea of it
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Feb 4 2005, 07:50 PM
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 dizzy me up. Group: Member Posts: 3,191 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 11,139 |
wow so creative. i love it.
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| *Azarel* |
Jan 14 2006, 05:22 AM
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I especially like the concept of contrasting a fairytale storybook to real life. Beautifully written, Jackie.
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