i effing hate jockers, seriously |
 Jul 14 2005, 03:10 PM
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mood: content  Group: Member Posts: 2,063 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 42,325  |
I Hate You
 Lacking skill and moral too They often make me feel so blue But most of the time They deserve Jason's 5000 fines I can't believe my very eyes But it's not like a big surprise It's not the last time that they'll strike Maybe next time, they'll steal my bike But I never thought it'd be me It wasn't even cool, honestly Guess you're wondering Whose the one blundering It's not me, and it's not you Yes, yes, it's you-know-who Not Voldemort, no no no It's the jockers, don't you know? [edit]  Solved.
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Jul 14 2005, 03:21 PM
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it made me smile. :)
you should post it on your xanga. |
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Jul 15 2005, 02:46 AM
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lol, that's awesome.
made me grin 
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Jul 15 2005, 12:31 PM
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 Bardic Nation Group: Member Posts: 1,113 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,059 |
shallow at best. honestly, it was not a poem.
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Jul 15 2005, 05:50 PM
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mood: content Group: Member Posts: 2,063 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 42,325 |
QUOTE(sikdragon @ Jul 15 2005, 12:31 PM) shallow at best. honestly, it was not a poem. Thanks for the honesty, I agree it's not the deepest subject but I don't think you can say it wasn't a poem. QUOTE A verbal composition designed to convey experiences, ideas, or emotions in a vivid and imaginative way, characterized by the use of language chosen for its sound and suggestive power and by the use of literary techniques such as meter, metaphor, and rhyme.
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Jul 16 2005, 01:25 PM
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 Residential Crazy Child Group: Member Posts: 934 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 116,897 |
Haha-so true.
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Jul 17 2005, 02:24 AM
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 Change Gon Come Group: Member Posts: 2,286 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,822 |
QUOTE(mocassinsx29 @ Jul 15 2005, 3:50 PM) Thanks for the honesty, I agree it's not the deepest subject but I don't think you can say it wasn't a poem. don't mind him. he's known for finding the faults in things. it's like simon, cept..not as witty. anyways. i thought it was a so so poem. not anything  but you didn't nuke it. i think it could be made more fun if you used colorful words or played with how the words can be placed. something like that.
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Jul 18 2005, 04:21 PM
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Bardic Nation Group: Member Posts: 1,113 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,059 |
dont mind him, he thinks the world is all dandelions and daisies. He's like paula only he's what we believe to be a guy.
You know how when people started playing rap. They say that's not music. Why? because it doesnt measure up to their definition of music. It was very cliche and just missed the entire point of poetry. Your definition is just the outer casing of a poem. Yeah you followed all the rules of poetry, but you missed the brutal honesty of good poetry. With serious practice you could get better. |
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Jul 19 2005, 02:27 PM
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 Queen of Random Information Group: Member Posts: 825 Joined: Jun 2005 Member No: 157,057 |
Well, it was nice for what it was about: jockers.
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