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the edge, shorter than normal
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post Jun 25 2005, 10:39 AM
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Another ditch in the road... you keep moving
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The Edge

trip. stumble. fall.
tumble without knowing
down the stairs along the hall
a descent to the cellar while i sit at the kitchen table
insufficient foresight
to see the edge of the cliff
screaming, spiralling down
i still havent seen the edge
if being yourself
hurts someone else
can i be another me?
inividuality the key to misery?
hypocrisy
and falacies?
the bottom getting close
crack of a broken neck
and i still havent seen the edge
 
 
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*stephinika*
post Jun 25 2005, 02:13 PM
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very nicely written. your vocabulary is great, always gets the message of your writings across nicely. awesome job as always james. _smile.gif
 
ChasingLife87
post Jun 25 2005, 03:41 PM
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ich heisse Meli.
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oh WOW, I like that... the last line especially. Wow. Awesome!
 
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post Jun 25 2005, 04:00 PM
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nice, very nice. I like it, good writing.
 
RiddleMeWonders
post Jun 26 2005, 05:01 PM
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fell in love with a boy
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You never bore me James. It's funny how when you start reading poetry, ou see all these seemingly genious pieces.. and then you keep reading, and you see the same formula over and over and over again. You are not one of those writers.
Thank you James.

Superb.
 
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post Jun 26 2005, 05:11 PM
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thank you, lindsay!

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and everyone else, too
 
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post Jul 9 2005, 01:47 AM
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great!
 

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