You Really Don't Know, (do you?) |
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 May 29 2005, 11:14 PM
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Do You?
You really can't see (can you?) See that you're the only one for me, And when I look into your eyes, I see where my everything lies. You really can't hear (can you?) Hear my silent tear after tear, And when I hear your voice, I'd listen to it all day, if I had a choice. You really can't smell (can you?) Smell the fear my essence does tell, And when I smell your sweet presence, It's like you're ominpresence. You really can't taste (can you?) Taste your own medicine go to waste, And when I taste your personality, I can see you're more than just a pretty face. You really can't feel (can you?) Feel that what I have for you is just so real, And when I feel your warmth around me, It makes my heart flutter with glee. You really don't know (do you?) Know that my feelings for you are like whoa, And I know, that when I see you there, You don't even care. - - - - - Mm, don't really like it at all... but I thought I'd just post it up anyways. |
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May 30 2005, 02:21 PM
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lol i like the line:
QUOTE Know that my feelings for you are like whoa, very interesting 
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May 30 2005, 06:12 PM
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i like how you go through the senses in each verse...nice concept, keep up the good work.
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May 30 2005, 09:02 PM
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 boo Group: Member Posts: 5,512 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 71,765 |
I lvoe it.
 Good work. =)
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Jun 4 2005, 02:17 AM
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very nice i would frame that and put it on my wall =).
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