My thoughts are my enemy |
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 May 29 2005, 08:45 PM
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 The Best Thing Since Instant Soup  Group: Member Posts: 815 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 104,928  |
He's after me.
But I have nowhere to go. Follow the path, the yellow brick road if you will. Wearing no shoes, and my flesh slowly rips apart from my feet as I run from the grim reaper. I've hit rockbottom. My feet stumble, trip all over each other as I lose control of them. The grim reaper approaches... I try to stay calm but then.. but then.. but then.. f**k. I see his scythe.. He's wielding it towards me. Floating in the air. I'm thinking Wow... what could I have done to deserve this? And then I remember... The pain I have caused everyone including myself. I'm the archetype of a flippant walking time bomb or at least that is my doctrine. I've been living an eon of indefinite lies, and the grim reaper's here to change the dogma that is my "life." I get on my knees to beg him to stop. He starts laughing... as if he is in complete euphoria. I just sit.. and sit.. and wait. The bastard punches me.. Why did you do that? I say, spitting out blood. He doesn't reply. I try to stand on my two imbrued feet, To run away. But my feet have been overcome by something.. I can't even feel them anymore. I scream in pain... Maybe someone will hear my voice on this night that doesn't belong. But no. The grim reaper leaves.. I sit there... motionless, helpless, almost bloodless... yet I have these troublesome thoughts. Isn't that something? The thoughts I used to cherish and love are now my enemy and my only priority. ______________________ I did this during class one day.. I was really mad that day, as you can tell... It was a really depressing day, but I thought the only way of expressing was to write. Please.. Comment! |
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May 29 2005, 08:57 PM
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 that heaven is overrated Group: Member Posts: 5,096 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 53,124 |
QUOTE(d0nchikit0 @ May 29 2005, 6:45 PM) but then.. but then.. but then.. f**k.  I didn't really like that part, but everything else sounded okay. Feel better, by the way. <3 |
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May 29 2005, 09:01 PM
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The Best Thing Since Instant Soup Group: Member Posts: 815 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 104,928 |
lol Thanks that was from 4 days ago though so I'm over it.. I just thought I'd post it.
And the but then but then but then f**k part was because I couldn't think lol |
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Jun 1 2005, 05:54 PM
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 What a hypocrite. Group: Member Posts: 2,754 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 128,150 |
This seems like a really emotional but good poem, nice work. (; I like the part where you said you followed the yellow brick road.
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Jun 4 2005, 02:05 AM
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yea the but then but then f**k part sounded a bit out of place buyt the rest was awesome
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