graduation, poem |
 Apr 23 2005, 01:46 PM
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im writing a poem on graduating for school... any ideas?
this is what i have so far The time has come for us to say goodbye, the end is near, of junior high. Tears fill our eyes as we all embrace, hoping mascara won’t run down my face. |
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Apr 23 2005, 03:33 PM
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 This bitch better work! Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 13,681 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 28,095 |
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i think it is good. but it sounds a little bit dramatic for junior high, don't you think? |
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Apr 23 2005, 03:35 PM
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 kristin Group: Member Posts: 5,705 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,985 |
I think I'll move this to HW bc she's like asking for help..and it's for graduation.
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Apr 23 2005, 04:30 PM
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 ...and this is me.. Group: Member Posts: 3,518 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 57,899 |
It's nice so far.
 Some ideas would be to write about what happened during junior high...good luck on finishing the poem. 
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Apr 23 2005, 11:03 PM
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 You can't keep running from what you're trying to find. Group: Official Member Posts: 5,030 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 54,096 |
that's good
 write about all the cool things that had happened during your years at JH, that you hope to see everyone again, how that school has changed and how you have grown as a person with everyone, etc. look at the song "graduation (friends forever)" by vitamin c for ideas
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Apr 25 2005, 01:09 PM
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hahah ai like the mascara part
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May 1 2005, 06:18 PM
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 Change Gon Come Group: Member Posts: 2,286 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,822 |
really though, too serious for junior high.
i recomend writing in free verse(no rhyming) about the things you did this year, and the things that your school did as a whole. i'd have a refrain(repeating part) to really drive through with the message. try to go for something powerful and moving. =] |
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May 1 2005, 06:47 PM
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What a nice poem
Though, I agree, it is a bit dramatic. But who said it couldn't be, you know? I think you should add things like how junior high affected you. Like, what it taught you-and how you'll bring all the things you learned ( not academically, like, moral-wise) to high school! Also, you don't have to rhyme =] A poem can sound good without rhyming. But it's your choice!
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May 4 2005, 07:55 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 183 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 121,503 |
running and screaming down the isle
i hope i do not slip on TILE WHAT? GRADUATION DAY? I MUST SMILE!!!!! HAHAHAHHAHAHA.........no |
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May 9 2005, 06:29 AM
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QUOTE(sw33t babii x33 @ Apr 24 2005, 2:46 AM) im writing a poem on graduating for school... any ideas? this is what i have so far The time has come for us to say goodbye, the end is near, of junior high. Tears fill our eyes as we all embrace, hoping mascara won’t run down my face.  i'm not sure but i'm thinking in the line that hoping mascara won’t run down my face you should change the my to an our. |
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May 11 2005, 09:19 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 213 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 115,730 |
Talk about your favorite memories of the year? Like "I'll never forget blah blah blah." Then something something. Anyways good job so far.
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May 12 2005, 07:34 PM
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 cacaboii. [SAN FRAN is where... Group: Member Posts: 566 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 7,562 |
hey.. its like mee 2 . but im volunteered for speech//
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May 15 2005, 12:54 PM
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 Chuck Norris can slam a revolving door. Group: Member Posts: 108 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 132,809 |
yeah, kinda dramatic.. and probably dont try anything w/ "time to say goodbye" cause you should make it memorable and happy =)
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May 22 2005, 10:57 PM
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 What a hypocrite. Group: Member Posts: 2,754 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 128,150 |
(= That's a good start right there! I guess you could mention some memories you had, or what made your junior high school years special. Oh --
QUOTE I'm not sure but i'm thinking in the line that hoping mascara won’t run down my face you should change the my to an our. What about the guys?
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May 27 2005, 03:20 AM
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 work hard. play hard. Group: Member Posts: 266 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 32,940 |
its so good
i can never write anything like that in my whole life. oh well yeh graduation from vitamin c is qutie good too. you can listen to it and get some ideas  haf fun writing it =)
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