Cutting, story i wrote cuz i was depressed... Options

[cutting_weirdo]

heys! this is a first in the stories ive posted here. so plz dont get pissed at me if ur not very happy with it... just calmly say "i dont like it" then u can go about and use ur time as u like. -_-

Cutting

By: Rei H.

After staring at the top of his bed for what seemed like hours after all the thinking over he had done, Josh took the box cutter that he had taken from the his uncle’s from his backpack and sat on his bed. He was sad, depressed, and at the moment, his life sucked ass. His girlfriend since he was twelve, that’s 4 years of wasted time, had dumped him without explanation. Just a gentle, untruthful “I’m sorry”. His only two real friends were now a couple, usually too busy making out and going out on dates to pay attention to their other best friend. He was lonely, his mother and father were dead, his grades were at their lowest point, and he had no living relative who cared for him, really. He could truly say he felt little point in living at all.

He gave a blank look as he extended the blade of the box cutter and pushed up his sleeve, revealing dark scars all across his wrist and arm. All of which were from weakly attempts of killing himself, but always chickening out at the last moment. Josh had been committing suicide since the summer of his junior year. He placed the tip on the pale flesh of his left wrist and slid the blade across deeply and swiftly. Josh watched the blood trickle from the cut with an expression of mild interest and slit his wrist again so there was a bleeding X on the inside of his wrist. His eye twitched with the twinge of pain he was well used to.

As the blood spilled, droplets at first but then in thick streams, he imagined the drops as his worries. He smiled as the blood continued to emit from him. For some reason, seeing the red issuing from his body satisfied him. He used his finger to wipe off a drop of blood that almost fell to his sheets and examined the droplet. His interest quickly faded and he licked the scarlet from his finger.

He cut himself once more and his head spun. While he still could, Josh quickly shoved the cutter back in his trunk. Then he lie back in his bed and let his worries dissolve as the blood escaped his body and he slowly lost consciousness forever more.

plz, plz, PLZ tell me wat ya think! ^_^ plz no yelling. byez!

[inthemudhole]

Pretty good, I like all of the descriptions.
Nice job. It's quite accurate too.

[ryfitaDF]

i don't like it. i hate cutting.

some of my writings concerning the topic:
http://www.createblog.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=60493
http://www.createblog.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=59887
http://www.createblog.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=58902
http://www.createblog.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=45140

[racoons > you]

well id say its nice, but thats the wrong word

's very descriptive

[Paradox of Life]

I like it, but it's kind of unrealistic. No one's life is that bad, but I like the way you wrote it. I like the figurative language. Maybe you could've added more of his own emotions. Somehow I think it could've been more deep if it were in 1st person (easier to convey thoughts), but I really like it.