lyrics..maybe? im not sure yet. Options

[aznxdreamer]

all mixed up...here and there again.

from some lie
those scars left over
regret
and with that knife...
hang up the phone and watch that red stuff drip down your arm
i dont think i care anymore
hear me.
im still falling
breathe
you always made me feel better when you whispered
to me
in the middle of the night
with those purple stars glowing against
that jet black sky.
and i close my eyes when i felt you get off the bed and
slammed the door behind you
satisfied?
i still you hear your every night
in every dream
il never feel safe, oh lord.
a lie...those times were all a lie
words were said and you forgot
i remember
hear the coffin close
and watch everyone walk away
as your left alone by the grave and the rain starts coming
a lie
its freezing. so numb. i cant feel the blade anymore
you promised.
and there i am
on that hard lumpy couch
with the lights turned off
and the tv turned up loud
and i laugh when i hear your voice
screaming from ouside my apartment door
to take you back
i laugh when i hear you crying
begging me to let you in
i laugh when i hear that gun shot
and i laugh when i see the blood leaking
through from under the door
then i cry.
i cry
i cry for days
locking myself in a closet
and
bang my fist against the wall
purple stars glowing against
that jet black sky
and with that knife...
hang up the phone
regret when i see the scars left over
from some lie.


not done yet. i dont even think im gonna make it into a song. yeah...so critiques?

[KissMe2408]

whoa...very intense.I think it is good, it would make a good song. the only part that i really would change was

"you promised.
and there i am
on that hard lumpy couch
with the lights turned off
and the tv turned up loud"

for some reason "on that hard lumpy couch" didn't fit in for me. I dunno, i thought it was good but try to think up somethan more dramatic to fit the rest of the story. but great job :) It was amazing :)

[ItzOnlySydney]

yea the hard lumpy couch made u go but other then that i could see it in my head every word good job.

[aznxdreamer]

yeah..i read it over when i posted it and i was like "wait..that doesnt sound right, oh well".

[xXMomoBubbleTeaX...]

Its sounds really good to me!!...