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 Mar 22 2005, 07:25 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer*  Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134  |
endless as it seems, hopeless as it looks
my dreams start to drift away lone some every night wishing on a star wishing for a chance that will come my way when it rains its like tears fall from heaven washes away my burden that ive held on to shines on a new day, when the sun comes out gentle words please my ears like i love you i only hope to live life the best i can and be strong for the ones i love and care for i want to be the smile that stops the frown and always be there till i can care no more waiting everyday for my chance to come its been here all along im the one to make those dreams come true its my job till my job is done something ive never really written before hahah its new IM READY FOR ANY CRITICISM!! |
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Mar 22 2005, 07:30 PM
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 Can't have the hand without the cock. Group: Member Posts: 2,481 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 50,622 |
haha, i thought it was sweet.
i liked it, good job, |
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Mar 22 2005, 08:50 PM
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 sorry. i drowned your fish. Group: Member Posts: 1,485 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 98,683 |
it has really powerful words .. i like it.
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Mar 22 2005, 08:57 PM
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 This is all my luck, it's all I got. Group: Member Posts: 1,373 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 76,532 |
Its great. Very sweet.
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Mar 22 2005, 10:05 PM
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 Imperfect... Group: Member Posts: 286 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 55,064 |
Wow...that was amazing. I like the way you worded things.
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Mar 23 2005, 02:20 PM
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 I'll never be who I was again.. Group: Member Posts: 2,886 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 77,981 |
wow that was good..i really liked the first paragraph...good job..
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