all that's left, when did the love go? |
| *islandgirl4eva* |
 Mar 14 2005, 11:12 PM
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Sorry for the angsty, heart-broken bit here. I just hurts...sooooooo much. I thought it would be forever...
never thought i'd break meeting you was a mistake that look in your eyes holding all your lies the words off your lips they're giving me tips i'm getting the story of you and your glory you sleeping with girls fingers twirling in curls caressing their skin it's a game that you win having fun in your bed then you sleep like the dead call me the next day tell it all play-by-play you send me your heart but mine's torn apart i wish you'd never spoke for now my spirit's broke |
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Mar 14 2005, 11:16 PM
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 durian  Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 13,124 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,860 |
Awww..
 Boys are evil! Girls can be evil too lol.. But still, boys are evil!  Aww  I really like the rhyming scheme. Very cool  You're so creative  :]
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| *stephinika* |
Mar 14 2005, 11:49 PM
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aww i hope you feel better.
well written though..the rhyming works. 
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Mar 15 2005, 12:20 AM
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 hello : ) Group: Official Member Posts: 4,227 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 13,139 |
Usually I have a problem when poems rhyme like yours but I really like it in this one. It fits well. It's a great poem. Is this the one you were telling me about? Anyways, hope things get better Naomi =)
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| *islandgirl4eva* |
Mar 15 2005, 10:03 PM
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^^ lol...for some reason I always rhyme like this. I like the way it flows better, especially when reciting it. It just sounds nice!
Thank you everyone for your praise. You're so sweet! |
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Mar 18 2005, 01:28 AM
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 crushed. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,432 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,026 |
feel better..love the way you rhyme
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