The Feeling, hope you guys like it |
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 Feb 24 2005, 10:27 PM
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yea...here's my second poem on cb...so yea:
I take a deep breath, Hold the shiny object Inbetween my fingers. A tear travels down my cheek And falls... As I take another deep breath, A drop falls from my wrist to the ground. My emotions escaped me, I felt nothing..... Stress overpowered me, I had sleepless nights, I couldn't conentrate, My life was falling apart. And now, Cutting overpowered me. I got such a high from it. I became addicted to it. As I watched the blood trickle down my wrist, I forgot about the pain I had inside. Everynight, The cuts got deeper, And deeper, And deeper. For the last time, I just sat there. I actually felt it. The vein kept spitting out blood. I actually felt it. I lay down in a pool of blood, The color no painter can mix. And drifted off into a dreamless sleep. yea...i used to cut, but then i stopped...so yea...sorry it was so long 
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Feb 25 2005, 01:08 AM
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 Ooh, Miranda. Group: Member Posts: 234 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 105,609 |
wow..sorta scary but really cool!
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Feb 25 2005, 05:52 AM
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de words r beautiful...but it also gave me a creepy feeling
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Feb 27 2005, 08:37 PM
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wow, that gave me chills, and it makes my wrists hurt...
but it shows you did a great job! |
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Feb 28 2005, 03:17 PM
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yeah that was rather...chilling. but well written.
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Feb 28 2005, 05:12 PM
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 my <3 is in Ohio Group: Member Posts: 899 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,599 |
well written. you used good words to express the emotions
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Mar 1 2005, 12:09 AM
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I think that's pretty damn good.
I'm glad you don't cut anymore! 
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Mar 1 2005, 12:47 AM
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Like your choice of words. Depict the situation very well. A thuroughly (don't mind the spelling) enjoyed piece
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