here's my first poem on cb, hope you like it |
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 Feb 22 2005, 09:55 PM
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ok, this probably will sound stupid, but it's what i felt at the moment:
I asked him if he really loved me, And then I was left in darkness My mind was blank My heart stopped beating My eyes pooled and burned My cheeks grew firey hot I couldn't move my feet, They were cemented to the ground I looked at him with disbelief He looked at me with a puzzled look Memories of pleasure started to run through my head As if I were watching them on film Little drops of tears Whisper of the pain I felt The power of NO got to me He said it with a strong, serious face, The power of NO killed me. |
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Feb 22 2005, 10:15 PM
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aww..
that's a sweet poem.. |
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Feb 24 2005, 01:19 AM
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I really like this poem...really. xx
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Feb 24 2005, 01:36 AM
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 This is all my luck, it's all I got. Group: Member Posts: 1,373 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 76,532 |
I really like this poem. Its so nice.
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Feb 24 2005, 05:30 AM
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wow...deep
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Feb 24 2005, 03:08 PM
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 i'm susan Group: Official Member Posts: 13,875 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 5,029 |
Yeah like what he said... very deep. It's like what you said up there is like your deep inner feelings... wow is that how much you like him? Anyways I like it, not that bad at all! I'll give you about 8.5/10 ^_^;;
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Feb 24 2005, 10:16 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 64 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 102,527 |
thanx you guys for the nice compliments...i'm probably gonna post another one on here about a sensitive subject...n e wayz...yea...thanx a million
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