I feel it now.., this thing called sorrow.. Options

[RiddleMeWonders]

He broke up with me last night.. funny, though, I think, because I knew it was going to happen.. I just had that feeling... like a tourniquet tied around my heart that kept pulling tighter and tighter.... I wrote this just before he called:

I feel the love.. and I feel the strain
And I know that if I don't tell you
I'll break without a sound
Here..
It's so clear..
And so blinding at the same time
We can't do this,
But... a kiss
I think will do just fine.
Where are we?
What did I do wrong?
The things we didn't say
We felt when we got home
I'm so sorry, but please...
Please, don't let me go..
Or, have I already lost you?
This is what I don't know..
Because I feel the pain...
Oh am I too late?
Things are going wrong
Even as I'm writing this song...
I don't want to move on.
To just be your friend yet..
To just forget it...
I want to stay with you..
Isn't there anything I can do?
I can't bear to lose you......

[*stephinika*]

i like it. you can see the emotion in your words. well written though...hope you feel better.

[smthngcrprategrl...]

its good. i understand what your going through. went through that recently. sucks hard core

[rOckThISshYt]

Ahhhh... A poet who can see the truth before themselves. One quality of a good poet is to be able to see someone's emotion. Even though it wasn't through poetry, you knew it was happening. Although the circumstances sad, great job.

[--{Empty}--]

I'll break without a sound

I like that line... mostly cause that's what happens to countless people, and nobody every really knows in the end all cause its silent. Unfortunate. But it happens. At any rate. Hope you're doin ok