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 Feb 19 2005, 11:56 PM
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 NO. I'm not 13. or 14. or 15. or 16.  Group: Member Posts: 4,616 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 30,577  |
this is a random poem i wrote a little more than a year ago.
Rain Down it falls from heaven, cleansing the earth clear and sweet gray and cloudy the rain falls for many days and many nights we are all Noah, trapped in our arks with nothing to do i need a dove. staring out the window at the wet, empty street a single object remains a girl, dressed in a pink raincoat she sits on the curb, with her elbows on her knees thinking. the bright red rose i once held in my hand is left in the street trampled on the ground once a reminder of the one who loved me the petals are scattered torn. blurry images cloud my mind the rain comes down harder little boys splash in puddles the girls shriek and run away if only there were silence. |
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Feb 20 2005, 04:31 AM
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i like it...i like how it flows and just the way it was written. nice job.
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Feb 20 2005, 09:02 AM
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 fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
It's mind cleansing... As if meant to calm, and then comes to conclusion.
I like it. |
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Feb 21 2005, 12:38 AM
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 High Voltage!∞ Group: Official Member Posts: 4,728 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 29,157 |
I really like it
 How it's written and all  good job!
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Feb 22 2005, 10:06 PM
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 my <3 is in Ohio Group: Member Posts: 899 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,599 |
something about it...i dunno it just works really well. good job!
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