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 Jan 24 2005, 08:33 PM
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 hannah the one and only~  Group: Member Posts: 175 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,080  |
i got this from a friend
i wrote this whole poem of things left unsaid... but then i earased the by accident... first i thought maybe it was sign... but i still have these feelings on my mind...maybe if i was brave we wouldnt be left in this perdicament.. i am weak on my own.. no...no i dont want to be alone.... |
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Jan 24 2005, 10:17 PM
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very cool. sounds lonly..:(
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Jan 26 2005, 03:04 PM
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aw i wish i coulda read it =(
feel the same way |
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| *Azarel* |
Jan 26 2005, 03:06 PM
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QUOTE(cewinee @ Jan 26 2005, 12:04 PM) aw i wish i coulda read it =( .. you did read it. .. the little blurb (second "paragraph) is the piece of writing. 
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Jan 27 2005, 12:03 AM
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to hell with you Group: Member Posts: 2,547 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,506 |
er...try putting it in poetry form? you know..one line and then another line..yeah. other than that, its alright
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| *stephinika* |
Jan 27 2005, 12:55 AM
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^^
agreed.. |
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Jan 27 2005, 04:04 PM
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not bad. but i think it would be considered prose, not poetry
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Jan 28 2005, 08:36 PM
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hannah the one and only~ Group: Member Posts: 175 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,080 |
first off i told my friend the constructive critiqueing but she never said it was a poem she said she earased the poem
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