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 Sep 15 2004, 04:33 PM
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te quiero  Group: Banned Posts: 2,586 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 14,678  |
i was wondering if it should go in the writings section, but i decided not to. if you mods feel it'd be better there... then move it.
its something that i wrote that seems to freak out some of my friends who've read it... stalker no matter what, my love, you are beautiful to me. eyes like windows to the soul, crystal as the sea no matter what you say, my love, i'll be right next to you maybe right, maybe left, maybe behind you too no matter where you run, my love, i'll be a step away i'll be right there for you, my love, until your dying day no matter how hard you push, my love, i'll stand as firm as rock i'm stronger than you think, my love, be careful.. you'll be shocked. you think you'll get rid of me? oh surely not, my love i'll stay by you forever, love.. you're my stained red, dying dove -melissa |
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Sep 15 2004, 04:48 PM
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 Kids.Have.All.The.Fun Group: Member Posts: 228 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 33,943 |
i think its good. doesnt scare me as long as you really arent a stalker. i mean writing lets out ur emotions, *but* its not always YOUR emotions. get me?
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| *AngelicEyz00* |
Sep 15 2004, 04:48 PM
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o0o, I like it!! <3 it is a bit stalkerish, eh?
 heh, but still.. very nice... It flows very well
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Sep 15 2004, 05:01 PM
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 i'm susan Group: Official Member Posts: 13,875 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 5,029 |
haha it will be scary if a guy wrote that to me hahahaha gives u the chills and the goosebumps! but great job on it haha^^;;
but i still think it should be in the writing section^^;; |
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Sep 15 2004, 05:02 PM
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 original member. Group: Official Member Posts: 4,825 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 1,460 |
Its freaky. xX;
I like it though =] [ppl mods, move this to intrest > writing] |
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Sep 15 2004, 05:15 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 3,102 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,162 |
I like it, even though it's a little creepy.
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Sep 15 2004, 05:18 PM
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 Ah, mon Dieu ! Group: Member Posts: 2,274 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,587 |
yeah, this belongs in writing, i think...
anyways, i think the poem's really nice... i didnt find it freaky at all. maybe it's cause im depressed. 
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| *tyedyefroggy* |
Sep 15 2004, 05:20 PM
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hmmm its pretty good but instead of shocked try you will be in shock.
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Sep 15 2004, 05:22 PM
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 This bitch better work! Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 13,681 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 28,095 |
QUOTE(mony0407 @ Sep 15 2004, 4:48 PM) i think its good. doesnt scare me as long as you really arent a stalker. i mean writing lets out ur emotions, *but* its not always YOUR emotions. get me? got it! 
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| *tweeak* |
Sep 15 2004, 05:27 PM
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its not that freaky but it is really good
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Sep 15 2004, 05:32 PM
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 I never give 4/10 Group: Member Posts: 627 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 45,375 |
I dont think it's freaky but good
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Oct 10 2004, 09:25 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 341 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 39,338 |
its not really all that freaky its good.....however if i receieved something like that i might be a little weirded out
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Oct 10 2004, 10:19 PM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
hmm very interesting.. it has a nice flow got me creeped out like someone was behind me =P
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Oct 11 2004, 03:14 AM
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 ~The CB Advice Giver~ Group: Member Posts: 505 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 53,021 |
as a poet (yes i know it hehe) i love it! its very well written, stalkish..not really, its just sorta telling how u will always be there for the woman u love
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Oct 11 2004, 10:10 AM
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 don't worry, be happy~ Group: Member Posts: 1,538 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 15,899 |
interesting poem, i like lol.
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Oct 11 2004, 03:19 PM
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te quiero Group: Banned Posts: 2,586 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 14,678 |
QUOTE(Oreo_bro @ Oct 11 2004, 3:14 AM) as a poet (yes i know it hehe) i love it! its very well written, stalkish..not really, its just sorta telling how u will always be there for the woman u love hm thanks? try rereading it and holding onto the words. especially the last line... maybe then, you'll start feelin the "stalkishness" of it. 
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Oct 11 2004, 04:29 PM
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 Kermit the frog = <3 Group: Member Posts: 2,315 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 15,215 |
oye.. that is freaky.
*shudders but nice job.
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Oct 11 2004, 07:34 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
good job lol nice flow too
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Oct 11 2004, 07:39 PM
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 *rawr baby* Group: Member Posts: 821 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 48,941 |
QUOTE(mony0407 @ Sep 15 2004, 5:48 PM) i think its good. doesnt scare me as long as you really arent a stalker. i mean writing lets out ur emotions, *but* its not always YOUR emotions. get me? Yea, as long as it's not something you personally feel like. |
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Oct 11 2004, 11:25 PM
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 lick me Group: Member Posts: 3,044 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 44,013 |
Doesnt freak me out, as long as you meant it =l or I would be..
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Oct 12 2004, 03:45 PM
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te quiero Group: Banned Posts: 2,586 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 14,678 |
QUOTE(mony0407 @ Sep 15 2004, 4:48 PM) i think its good. doesnt scare me as long as you really arent a stalker. i mean writing lets out ur emotions, *but* its not always YOUR emotions. get me? haha don't worry. that's not what i'm thinking. |
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