For you, sad poem I guess |
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 Aug 24 2004, 06:40 PM
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 DecadentVoid  Group: Member Posts: 97 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 15,192  |
Dancing to my macabre melody
Pools of blood washing over me Life draining away oh so slowly As I relive the latest tragedy This bloody rhapsody Is taking over me My body will soon be empty My demons will soon be set free Though my soul will never truely be As my blood line ends here with me The choice I made so willingly Is the course for you to be happy And that is when the irony Finally washes over me I lived my life for thee But in the end there was only me Just something I wrote awhile back and I wanted to share it |
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Aug 24 2004, 06:47 PM
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 and they say imitation is flattering Group: Member Posts: 1,337 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,269 |
Great descriptions and wording...
Very nice |
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Aug 31 2004, 02:12 PM
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 i'm susan Group: Official Member Posts: 13,875 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 5,029 |
lol it sounds like a lyric, if this is not a lyric then that's a good poem u did lol hehe i dont know ur description made into a lyric hehe^^
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Aug 31 2004, 09:33 PM
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DecadentVoid Group: Member Posts: 97 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 15,192 |
It has a sing song kinda feel to it and it has a couple of musical refrencess
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Sep 2 2004, 02:59 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,384 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 37,337 |
yea teh rhyming part makes it sound lyrical ya kno...
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Sep 3 2004, 01:49 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 866 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 35,809 |
QUOTE(Thradrien_Blake @ Aug 24 2004, 6:47 PM) Great descriptions and wording... Very nice i agree...it is nice 
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Sep 7 2004, 08:01 AM
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Brie Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 10,172 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,548 |
Yeah.
Good descriptions, and great wording. I like it. Good job, James! :D |
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