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 Aug 10 2004, 02:39 AM
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 Hip-Hop's Thai Boxer..  Group: Member Posts: 43 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,679  |
verse I wrote to this girl a while back..
I can't explain all of my actions, the yelling and the rudeness - The truth is, I think the pain from Cupid's arrow made me do this - When I was hurt, I swore your words' uses was endless - You were my doctor, minus the suit n syringes - I can't let go, and I know that the pain is worth you - Hate when I don't have you, and despise this patience virtue - When my words hurt you, girl, the pain inside's shifty - I step out in the rain, and let the angels cry with me - You're all I need, so your departure would bring death to me - You're ecstasy, I'd choose you over a breath to breathe - So step with me, take my hand, my words aren't untrue - You give me life like the sun do, you're the one, boo, I LOVE YOU - |
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Aug 10 2004, 04:45 AM
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 Your love is a razorblade kiss ♥ Group: Member Posts: 1,794 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 9,959 |
omg... ur such a sweet guy
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Aug 10 2004, 05:12 AM
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Hip-Hop's Thai Boxer.. Group: Member Posts: 43 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,679 |
Haha.. Thank you =)
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Aug 10 2004, 06:24 AM
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 What the fack. Group: Official Member Posts: 6,164 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 8,519 |
You're very talented and sweet. Very refreshing stuff.
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Aug 10 2004, 04:48 PM
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 Cb's Emotional Writer Group: Member Posts: 166 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 33,300 |
*acts like a groupie*
awww jake, u so freakin sweet omg omg im ur bigest fan omg ur so damn cool! lol lmao just messin, nice lol |
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Aug 10 2004, 06:41 PM
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Hip-Hop's Thai Boxer.. Group: Member Posts: 43 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,679 |
gimme gimme gimme that groupie love..
haha, naw.. =P Thanks, people.. |
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Aug 10 2004, 07:04 PM
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 wanderlust personified. Group: Official Designer Posts: 7,515 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 797 |
very nice. lucky girl.
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Aug 10 2004, 11:38 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 80 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 31,071 |
ha, could be a rap...that would be tight lol. BUt it is real sweet..sounds good
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Aug 11 2004, 12:11 AM
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Hip-Hop's Thai Boxer.. Group: Member Posts: 43 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,679 |
thanks for the replies.. and ^^ yeah.. it IS a rap.. but rap verses are poetry also.. or at least can be
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Aug 11 2004, 02:17 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,384 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 37,337 |
wow that is serious skill
i am big fan of rapping that is so CRAZY GOOD rap verse right thurr and yea rap IS poetry 
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Aug 12 2004, 05:19 PM
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 Random Rei =) Group: Member Posts: 456 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 25,490 |
in one of my posts, u said to hit da song for u..what do u mean by that? i'm kinda brainless and nice writing u got there.
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Aug 12 2004, 05:37 PM
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 Newbie Group: Member Posts: 6 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 7,744 |
i didnt even realize it was a rap, but you're right rap is poetry and that was a great poem. nice work!
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