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My mask, Poem
kantoaznboi
post Jul 2 2004, 02:18 AM
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wat do u think of this poem i wrote? ur honest opinion.




When I’m around people,
I put up a mask,
Smile, laughter and joy,
But inside I feel like I’ve died.
My soul tearing apart,
My heart fragile like a piece of glass,
Shattering into a million shards,
And I cry inside,
Being strong on the outside,
Never to show my true feelings.
I try and forget you,
But you always
Come back to my thoughts.
Sadness consumes me,
And I attain a feeling,
That I am falling
In an endless pit,
Never being able to get out,
Always stuck
In my own abyss of sorrow.

Consumed with hatred and envy,
Seeing couples holding hands,
Knowing
That I will never have that with you,
My heartaches with each smile u give,
Like someone squeezing it
Til it breaks.
 
tu sho
post Jul 2 2004, 02:20 AM
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here we go again.. slit ur rists...


lol j/k


beautiful man. very beautiful. i like it 10/10
 
sheddingtears
post Jul 2 2004, 06:23 AM
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Once again, another poem I can relate to.
It's awesome.
 
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post Jul 3 2004, 03:27 AM
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*sigh* This relates to me too....
 
angel-roh
post Jul 7 2004, 01:59 AM
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i gotta give u 9.999/10...just by one point...cause these poems reminded me of one of my best friend, bobby who had loved me for the last 3 years... it's like this is his feelings towards me...that poem so relates to him... dang u and bobby are like same or something? mellow.gif lol jk
 

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