This Air You Breathe, Tell me your honest opinion. =) Options

[CupcakeMonster]

Tell me what you honestly think. =)



Moving from a big city like Newyork,NY to a country town like Hickoryflatt,MS can be very difficult. Especially when your an orphan, like me. Yep. It's true. I'm an orphan about to be adopted to absolute strangers. It's not as hard as i'm making it seem. Actually it's really easy. I've been adopted out since I was born. Nobody seems to want me. I don't see any problem in me. I have long brown hair with blonde highlights. My hair is in layers and I have bangs that swoosh to the side. I'm abit boney I might add and very fragile. You could say i'm abit of a clutz. I'm pretty short. I'm only five'four and a half. I guess it's my age that makes people not want to adopt me, i'm sixteen by the way. I also guess it's the way I dress. I mostly wear dark clothes with a splash of color. My average wear would be some type of flats, a pair of jeans, a tee-shirt, and a jacket. Which I get all my clothes from HotTopic or some store close to it. I wear dark color'd make-up, I always had. Maybe it would destract people from noticing me...maybe freaking them out alittle, I hoped. I don't see why anyone would want to adopt me. Me? Of all the gorgeous girls...why me?

Time to meet my future home. My bones started to shake as I got out of the cab. I didn't want to be here. I wanted to be with my friends back in Newyork. Why couldn't I just go back there? I'm sure they won't care. Several thoughts ran through my head as I walked closer to the house. The house was the classic white picked fense house. It looked so perfect. The lawn perfectly green, the driveway humongious it would have eaten my old room in a heart beat. I started walking up to the front door nerveous and cautious. As soon as I went to knock on the front door, the door slammed open. " Hi there Kristen" said an unfamilar voice. "I'm Brittany your new foster parent-" Just as she was about to say something else another unfamilar voice spoke up "Hi there dear, I'm Johnathan i'm also your foster parent. We are glad to meet you. Welcome home." They let me inside showing me around the house it was very elegant and beautiful. "Woah, this is a very pretty house...i've never-" I mutterd."No need to say anymore we know what you mean. If you want you can go unpack in your room it's just around the corner to the left. We'll fix you up a snack." Brittany said enthuastically. They looked so perfect. Like the brady bunch or something. Nevertheless, I headed for my bedroom. I saw the door it was a pinkish color, almost to a hot pink. It said on the door. "Kristen's Room" and below that it also said "stay out or.....yeah" I guess they understand me alittle. I smiled as I opened the bedroom door. I stood in shock as my eyes raced around the room scanning it. It was so pretty. No not just pretty, perfect. It described me in every way. I was so happy. It was the best thing anyone has ever done for me, well it was just about the only thing anyone has ever done for me. The room had posters on the roof of my favorate bands. It also had a rounded bed in the corner that looked like it could swollow me whole. It was also pink as the door. The walls were pink, black, and white. It had a arty taste to it. I loved it. There was a small tabel next to the bed with a little lamp on it. and beside that was a computer desk with a labtop. I walked over slowely as I looked at it. It was a black and white labtop with a webcam, speakers, and everything. It had a note on it. The note said "Welcome to your new life, a new start. I hope you enjoy this present from us to you and I hope you enjoy your journey to a new start." I put the note down and looked at my dresser and my vanity. I went to the closet and opened it up. It was one of those closets that slide open. Inside of the closet was new clothes, new shoes. Clothes I would actually love to wear. I layed on my bed, knocking my shoes onto the small circle rug on the floor as i thought outloud to myself. "could it get any better..." There was a knock at the door. "Come in" I said. "Theres food in the kitchen if your hungry make yourself at home."said Brittany "I think I already have" I said. "Well across the hall is your bathroom with some make-up in the cabnet. Feel free to do what you please." She said "Alright, Will do. Um..When does school start?" I said. "Tomorrow. We already registered you there. I think you'll love it. We wanted to get you a car but i'll drive you for now"She said "Oh alright that's fine with me afer all you seem like a pretty cool mom so far, I mean look at this room it is perfect" I said. "Thank you for complementing me on my good taste in designing. I got to head to work but theres food in there and Johnathan will hardly ever be home. He has work 24/7, well it seems like it. Gotta run" She said as she closed the door. A few minutes later I could hear her leaving the house. I layed down thinking how lucky I am for this, for me having a place to live. I finally have a home, and real parents. Since I never knew my own.

Soon eneough it was morning. The alarm clock went off and I quickly jumped to my feet grabbing a towel and heading to the bathroom. "Good morning"Kristen said. said. "Good morning, school time" I smiled "yes it is don't take to long we leave shortly..in about a half a hour" She said "alright I won't be long" I took my shower and rushed to blow dry and strighten my hair and grab some clothes to wear, and shoes. And I quickly got dressed. I went to the bathroom to fix my make-up. I always put on heavy eyeliner and pale lipstick that matched my base, and mascare. I went into the bedroom and grabbed my purse and keys to the house. I ran outside and into the car. All the way there I was anxcious and nervous. But soon eneough the ride was over. I was at school. "Alright here you go, I know your not two but go to the office and get your schduel and head to class." She smiled "thanks bye see you at home" I shut the door and walked into the building. This was a very small school. The building was old and looked like it would fall any second. I opened the office door and headed inside and walked up to the counter. "Hi i'm Kristen...I'm new here and i need my schduel" The lady at the desk knew who i was infact she said "Oh hi there we've been expecting you, your foster parents told us that you would be comming today"she said "here's your schduel" She handed it to me. "umm i don't know where any of these classes are"i said nervous "oh right sorrie i'll take you to your home room" she walked me to class. What seemed like forever. She walked into the class and mutterd something to the teacher and she left out. "Hi there Kristen take a seat." I sat down to the closest chair I could find. I looked around at all these people, people I would probably never be friends with. Then a boy came in. He looked gorgeous. He had black hair medium length, he was very muscelly and he looked very very pale. He looked at me for what seemed like forever as he sat across from me. I quickly looked away right when our eyes met each others. I rambled in my purse looking for nothing at all just keeping myself busy. I looked up one more time to find he was looking at me. I went to look away but he began to speak in a low-tone sexy voice."Hi there, I'm Jacob. You must be new here" I said"y-e-s i'm new here. I'm Kristen." Jacob said"well I guess you'll need an escort to show you to class, right?-" I nodded and then went to catch my breath. "-I thought so. Follow me and i'll show you to your next class." He grabbed my schduel. "thanks" I said in a light voice,hopeing he wouldn't hear. "no problem, dear." he smiled well more like a smurk, but it was so...breathtaking. Sooneneough the bell rang and I grabbed my purse following him to the next class room. "you have almost all my classes" he said enthuastically. I didn't say anything, I didn't want to seem like a dork, which I was. "Your really quiet, well it's ok I get that alot. Did you know you are really beautiful" He was looking stright at me, and stright into my eyes. "who me?" I said questioning him. "Yes you, duh. Well here's the next class, pick a seat next to me" -Jacob said. "Okie, if you want" I smiled and he held out his hand to grab the door and he opened it and i walked in. I went to the teacher and showed her my schduel and she told me to pick a seat. I picked the seat right behind Jacob. So he wouldn't catch me glancing up at him, once in a while. We didn't speak after that I focused on my classwork. The rest of the day was a blur, I barely remember any of it. Next thing I know i'm at home writting in my journal, flipping the radio station. Later that night I couldn't sleep. I kept thinking of that Jacob guy. Why was he stuck in my head so much?

[Eww]

That was pretty long.
I didn't exactly read the whole thing v.v

But, I can definitely imagine it being very difficult to move from the city all the way out to the country. I live in New York too.

Hope things go well for you (:

[CupcakeMonster]

Yeah.
The story isn't about me but thanks.
=) Well I did move from Memphis to Mississippi.
But the story isn't based on me.

[Eww]

OH. Lmfao.
I feel smart.

[CupcakeMonster]

It's okie. I think everybody has those smart moments. x]

[icecreamisyummy]

the sotry is about jacob.


hmmm i hope he's not trying to get some ass.

be careful

not saying that he's a bad guy. but youre new there, so you might now know better

[CupcakeMonster]

WahWaWaaaaa! Someone tell me your opinion! It's a vampire story but that's what i've written so far, it's all in my head. x]

[emberfly]

That was pretty long.
I didn't exactly read the whole thing v.v

But, I can definitely imagine it being very difficult to move from the city all the way out to the country. I live in New York too.

Hope things go well for you (:

wow.. people consider MS the country? I don't even think Hickoryflatt is a city.. but I may be wrong.

[shoryuken]

Tell me what you honestly think. =)
Moving from a big city like Newyork,NY to a country town like Hickoryflatt,MS can be very difficult. Especially when your an orphan, like me. Yep. It's true. I'm an orphan about to be adopted to absolute strangers. It's not as hard as i'm making it seem. Actually it's really easy. I've been adopted out since I was born. Nobody seems to want me. I don't see any problem in me. I have long brown hair with blonde highlights. My hair is in layers and I have bangs that swoosh to the side. I'm abit boney I might add and very fragile. You could say i'm abit of a clutz. I'm pretty short. I'm only five'four and a half. I guess it's my age that makes people not want to adopt me, i'm sixteen by the way. I also guess it's the way I dress. I mostly wear dark clothes with a splash of color. My average wear would be some type of flats, a pair of jeans, a tee-shirt, and a jacket. Which I get all my clothes from HotTopic or some store close to it. I wear dark color'd make-up, I always had. Maybe it would destract people from noticing me...maybe freaking them out alittle, I hoped. I don't see why anyone would want to adopt me. Me? Of all the gorgeous girls...why me?

Time to meet my future home. My bones started to shake as I got out of the cab. I didn't want to be here. I wanted to be with my friends back in Newyork. Why couldn't I just go back there? I'm sure they won't care. Several thoughts ran through my head as I walked closer to the house. The house was the classic white picked fense house. It looked so perfect. The lawn perfectly green, the driveway humongious it would have eaten my old room in a heart beat. I started walking up to the front door nerveous and cautious. As soon as I went to knock on the front door, the door slammed open. " Hi there Kristen" said an unfamilar voice. "I'm Brittany your new foster parent-" Just as she was about to say something else another unfamilar voice spoke up "Hi there dear, I'm Johnathan i'm also your foster parent. We are glad to meet you. Welcome home." They let me inside showing me around the house it was very elegant and beautiful. "Woah, this is a very pretty house...i've never-" I mutterd."No need to say anymore we know what you mean. If you want you can go unpack in your room it's just around the corner to the left. We'll fix you up a snack." Brittany said enthuastically. They looked so perfect. Like the brady bunch or something. Nevertheless, I headed for my bedroom. I saw the door it was a pinkish color, almost to a hot pink. It said on the door. "Kristen's Room" and below that it also said "stay out or.....yeah" I guess they understand me alittle. I smiled as I opened the bedroom door. I stood in shock as my eyes raced around the room scanning it. It was so pretty. No not just pretty, perfect. It described me in every way. I was so happy. It was the best thing anyone has ever done for me, well it was just about the only thing anyone has ever done for me. The room had posters on the roof of my favorate bands. It also had a rounded bed in the corner that looked like it could swollow me whole. It was also pink as the door. The walls were pink, black, and white. It had a arty taste to it. I loved it. There was a small tabel next to the bed with a little lamp on it. and beside that was a computer desk with a labtop. I walked over slowely as I looked at it. It was a black and white labtop with a webcam, speakers, and everything. It had a note on it. The note said "Welcome to your new life, a new start. I hope you enjoy this present from us to you and I hope you enjoy your journey to a new start." I put the note down and looked at my dresser and my vanity. I went to the closet and opened it up. It was one of those closets that slide open. Inside of the closet was new clothes, new shoes. Clothes I would actually love to wear. I layed on my bed, knocking my shoes onto the small circle rug on the floor as i thought outloud to myself. "could it get any better..." There was a knock at the door. "Come in" I said. "Theres food in the kitchen if your hungry make yourself at home."said Brittany "I think I already have" I said. "Well across the hall is your bathroom with some make-up in the cabnet. Feel free to do what you please." She said "Alright, Will do. Um..When does school start?" I said. "Tomorrow. We already registered you there. I think you'll love it. We wanted to get you a car but i'll drive you for now"She said "Oh alright that's fine with me afer all you seem like a pretty cool mom so far, I mean look at this room it is perfect" I said. "Thank you for complementing me on my good taste in designing. I got to head to work but theres food in there and Johnathan will hardly ever be home. He has work 24/7, well it seems like it. Gotta run" She said as she closed the door. A few minutes later I could hear her leaving the house. I layed down thinking how lucky I am for this, for me having a place to live. I finally have a home, and real parents. Since I never knew my own.

Soon eneough it was morning. The alarm clock went off and I quickly jumped to my feet grabbing a towel and heading to the bathroom. "Good morning"Kristen said. said. "Good morning, school time" I smiled "yes it is don't take to long we leave shortly..in about a half a hour" She said "alright I won't be long" I took my shower and rushed to blow dry and strighten my hair and grab some clothes to wear, and shoes. And I quickly got dressed. I went to the bathroom to fix my make-up. I always put on heavy eyeliner and pale lipstick that matched my base, and mascare. I went into the bedroom and grabbed my purse and keys to the house. I ran outside and into the car. All the way there I was anxcious and nervous. But soon eneough the ride was over. I was at school. "Alright here you go, I know your not two but go to the office and get your schduel and head to class." She smiled "thanks bye see you at home" I shut the door and walked into the building. This was a very small school. The building was old and looked like it would fall any second. I opened the office door and headed inside and walked up to the counter. "Hi i'm Kristen...I'm new here and i need my schduel" The lady at the desk knew who i was infact she said "Oh hi there we've been expecting you, your foster parents told us that you would be comming today"she said "here's your schduel" She handed it to me. "umm i don't know where any of these classes are"i said nervous "oh right sorrie i'll take you to your home room" she walked me to class. What seemed like forever. She walked into the class and mutterd something to the teacher and she left out. "Hi there Kristen take a seat." I sat down to the closest chair I could find. I looked around at all these people, people I would probably never be friends with. Then a boy came in. He looked gorgeous. He had black hair medium length, he was very muscelly and he looked very very pale. He looked at me for what seemed like forever as he sat across from me. I quickly looked away right when our eyes met each others. I rambled in my purse looking for nothing at all just keeping myself busy. I looked up one more time to find he was looking at me. I went to look away but he began to speak in a low-tone sexy voice."Hi there, I'm Jacob. You must be new here" I said"y-e-s i'm new here. I'm Kristen." Jacob said"well I guess you'll need an escort to show you to class, right?-" I nodded and then went to catch my breath. "-I thought so. Follow me and i'll show you to your next class." He grabbed my schduel. "thanks" I said in a light voice,hopeing he wouldn't hear. "no problem, dear." he smiled well more like a smurk, but it was so...breathtaking. Sooneneough the bell rang and I grabbed my purse following him to the next class room. "you have almost all my classes" he said enthuastically. I didn't say anything, I didn't want to seem like a dork, which I was. "Your really quiet, well it's ok I get that alot. Did you know you are really beautiful" He was looking stright at me, and stright into my eyes. "who me?" I said questioning him. "Yes you, duh. Well here's the next class, pick a seat next to me" -Jacob said. "Okie, if you want" I smiled and he held out his hand to grab the door and he opened it and i walked in. I went to the teacher and showed her my schduel and she told me to pick a seat. I picked the seat right behind Jacob. So he wouldn't catch me glancing up at him, once in a while. We didn't speak after that I focused on my classwork. The rest of the day was a blur, I barely remember any of it. Next thing I know i'm at home writting in my journal, flipping the radio station. Later that night I couldn't sleep. I kept thinking of that Jacob guy. Why was he stuck in my head so much?

plzzz teell sexxi prinn u kiideen...

GTFFOO hurr withh daatt shiett.. LAAMMEE..

[Tung]

Tell me what you honestly think. =)
Moving from a big city like Newyork,NY to a country town like Hickoryflatt,MS can be very difficult. Especially when your an orphan, like me. Yep. It's true. I'm an orphan about to be adopted to absolute strangers. It's not as hard as i'm making it seem. Actually it's really easy. I've been adopted out since I was born. Nobody seems to want me. I don't see any problem in me. I have long brown hair with blonde highlights. My hair is in layers and I have bangs that swoosh to the side. I'm abit boney I might add and very fragile. You could say i'm abit of a clutz. I'm pretty short. I'm only five'four and a half. I guess it's my age that makes people not want to adopt me, i'm sixteen by the way. I also guess it's the way I dress. I mostly wear dark clothes with a splash of color. My average wear would be some type of flats, a pair of jeans, a tee-shirt, and a jacket. Which I get all my clothes from HotTopic or some store close to it. I wear dark color'd make-up, I always had. Maybe it would destract people from noticing me...maybe freaking them out alittle, I hoped. I don't see why anyone would want to adopt me. Me? Of all the gorgeous girls...why me?

Time to meet my future home. My bones started to shake as I got out of the cab. I didn't want to be here. I wanted to be with my friends back in Newyork. Why couldn't I just go back there? I'm sure they won't care. Several thoughts ran through my head as I walked closer to the house. The house was the classic white picked fense house. It looked so perfect. The lawn perfectly green, the driveway humongious it would have eaten my old room in a heart beat. I started walking up to the front door nerveous and cautious. As soon as I went to knock on the front door, the door slammed open. " Hi there Kristen" said an unfamilar voice. "I'm Brittany your new foster parent-" Just as she was about to say something else another unfamilar voice spoke up "Hi there dear, I'm Johnathan i'm also your foster parent. We are glad to meet you. Welcome home." They let me inside showing me around the house it was very elegant and beautiful. "Woah, this is a very pretty house...i've never-" I mutterd."No need to say anymore we know what you mean. If you want you can go unpack in your room it's just around the corner to the left. We'll fix you up a snack." Brittany said enthuastically. They looked so perfect. Like the brady bunch or something. Nevertheless, I headed for my bedroom. I saw the door it was a pinkish color, almost to a hot pink. It said on the door. "Kristen's Room" and below that it also said "stay out or.....yeah" I guess they understand me alittle. I smiled as I opened the bedroom door. I stood in shock as my eyes raced around the room scanning it. It was so pretty. No not just pretty, perfect. It described me in every way. I was so happy. It was the best thing anyone has ever done for me, well it was just about the only thing anyone has ever done for me. The room had posters on the roof of my favorate bands. It also had a rounded bed in the corner that looked like it could swollow me whole. It was also pink as the door. The walls were pink, black, and white. It had a arty taste to it. I loved it. There was a small tabel next to the bed with a little lamp on it. and beside that was a computer desk with a labtop. I walked over slowely as I looked at it. It was a black and white labtop with a webcam, speakers, and everything. It had a note on it. The note said "Welcome to your new life, a new start. I hope you enjoy this present from us to you and I hope you enjoy your journey to a new start." I put the note down and looked at my dresser and my vanity. I went to the closet and opened it up. It was one of those closets that slide open. Inside of the closet was new clothes, new shoes. Clothes I would actually love to wear. I layed on my bed, knocking my shoes onto the small circle rug on the floor as i thought outloud to myself. "could it get any better..." There was a knock at the door. "Come in" I said. "Theres food in the kitchen if your hungry make yourself at home."said Brittany "I think I already have" I said. "Well across the hall is your bathroom with some make-up in the cabnet. Feel free to do what you please." She said "Alright, Will do. Um..When does school start?" I said. "Tomorrow. We already registered you there. I think you'll love it. We wanted to get you a car but i'll drive you for now"She said "Oh alright that's fine with me afer all you seem like a pretty cool mom so far, I mean look at this room it is perfect" I said. "Thank you for complementing me on my good taste in designing. I got to head to work but theres food in there and Johnathan will hardly ever be home. He has work 24/7, well it seems like it. Gotta run" She said as she closed the door. A few minutes later I could hear her leaving the house. I layed down thinking how lucky I am for this, for me having a place to live. I finally have a home, and real parents. Since I never knew my own.

Soon eneough it was morning. The alarm clock went off and I quickly jumped to my feet grabbing a towel and heading to the bathroom. "Good morning"Kristen said. said. "Good morning, school time" I smiled "yes it is don't take to long we leave shortly..in about a half a hour" She said "alright I won't be long" I took my shower and rushed to blow dry and strighten my hair and grab some clothes to wear, and shoes. And I quickly got dressed. I went to the bathroom to fix my make-up. I always put on heavy eyeliner and pale lipstick that matched my base, and mascare. I went into the bedroom and grabbed my purse and keys to the house. I ran outside and into the car. All the way there I was anxcious and nervous. But soon eneough the ride was over. I was at school. "Alright here you go, I know your not two but go to the office and get your schduel and head to class." She smiled "thanks bye see you at home" I shut the door and walked into the building. This was a very small school. The building was old and looked like it would fall any second. I opened the office door and headed inside and walked up to the counter. "Hi i'm Kristen...I'm new here and i need my schduel" The lady at the desk knew who i was infact she said "Oh hi there we've been expecting you, your foster parents told us that you would be comming today"she said "here's your schduel" She handed it to me. "umm i don't know where any of these classes are"i said nervous "oh right sorrie i'll take you to your home room" she walked me to class. What seemed like forever. She walked into the class and mutterd something to the teacher and she left out. "Hi there Kristen take a seat." I sat down to the closest chair I could find. I looked around at all these people, people I would probably never be friends with. Then a boy came in. He looked gorgeous. He had black hair medium length, he was very muscelly and he looked very very pale. He looked at me for what seemed like forever as he sat across from me. I quickly looked away right when our eyes met each others. I rambled in my purse looking for nothing at all just keeping myself busy. I looked up one more time to find he was looking at me. I went to look away but he began to speak in a low-tone sexy voice."Hi there, I'm Jacob. You must be new here" I said"y-e-s i'm new here. I'm Kristen." Jacob said"well I guess you'll need an escort to show you to class, right?-" I nodded and then went to catch my breath. "-I thought so. Follow me and i'll show you to your next class." He grabbed my schduel. "thanks" I said in a light voice,hopeing he wouldn't hear. "no problem, dear." he smiled well more like a smurk, but it was so...breathtaking. Sooneneough the bell rang and I grabbed my purse following him to the next class room. "you have almost all my classes" he said enthuastically. I didn't say anything, I didn't want to seem like a dork, which I was. "Your really quiet, well it's ok I get that alot. Did you know you are really beautiful" He was looking stright at me, and stright into my eyes. "who me?" I said questioning him. "Yes you, duh. Well here's the next class, pick a seat next to me" -Jacob said. "Okie, if you want" I smiled and he held out his hand to grab the door and he opened it and i walked in. I went to the teacher and showed her my schduel and she told me to pick a seat. I picked the seat right behind Jacob. So he wouldn't catch me glancing up at him, once in a while. We didn't speak after that I focused on my classwork. The rest of the day was a blur, I barely remember any of it. Next thing I know i'm at home writting in my journal, flipping the radio station. Later that night I couldn't sleep. I kept thinking of that Jacob guy. Why was he stuck in my head so much?

Nice job on this writing dumbass.