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 Jun 22 2004, 10:13 PM
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 pixel hybrid  Group: Member Posts: 6,410 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 1,081  |
You don't understand.
Can't you see? You're the only one I need. But you keep going a w a y Away from me. Not coming back. Pretending. Ignoring. Being Blind. Took my heart. I want it back. I want it back. How? Just tell me... Tell me 3 words. Because I love you. Love me back. At least talk to me. Pretend you care. But ignore my love. I love you. |
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Jun 23 2004, 04:34 AM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 521 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 12,812 |
the word 'away' has an effect on it; it's like concrete poetry. i prefer it over writing narrative poems, etc. because i like creating images by shaping the words into them, rather than attempting to form the words into vivid illustrations into people's minds, because i'm incapable of it. lol. i think i'm good at concrete poetry, and the word 'away' reminded me of it. good poem..i don't like reading love-related poems though. dunno, they seem so..common.
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Jun 23 2004, 02:09 PM
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pixel hybrid Group: Member Posts: 6,410 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 1,081 |
QUOTE(shortie09 @ Jun 23 2004, 5:34 AM) the word 'away' has an effect on it; it's like concrete poetry. i prefer it over writing narrative poems, etc. because i like creating images by shaping the words into them, rather than attempting to form the words into vivid illustrations into people's minds, because i'm incapable of it. lol. i think i'm good at concrete poetry, and the word 'away' reminded me of it. good poem..i don't like reading love-related poems though. dunno, they seem so..common. this isn't love. this is lust. 
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Jun 23 2004, 02:13 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,628 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 13,359 |
ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh, I like that
Very nice kim |
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Jun 23 2004, 04:11 PM
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pixel hybrid Group: Member Posts: 6,410 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 1,081 |
QUOTE(dukesoccer07 @ Jun 23 2004, 3:13 PM) ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh, I like that Very nice kim Thanks, Jamie! 
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Jun 23 2004, 04:23 PM
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 old school member Group: Member Posts: 1,796 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 843 |
Man I feel like that right now. Love sucks butt. J. Lo's butt to be exact. It's good kimmy!
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Jun 23 2004, 10:22 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 521 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 12,812 |
QUOTE(lilangelgurlpnai @ Jun 23 2004, 2:09 PM) this isn't love. this is lust. okay.  you used the word 'love' in there, so go figure. people don't like it often when i say they're not in love but in lust. gets them aggravated. 
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Jun 23 2004, 11:33 PM
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pixel hybrid Group: Member Posts: 6,410 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 1,081 |
QUOTE(shortie09 @ Jun 23 2004, 11:22 PM) okay. you used the word 'love' in there, so go figure. people don't like it often when i say they're not in love but in lust. gets them aggravated. Sorry. Haha. I'm kind of sad...but hey.. its just a poem. I can write silly poems right now if I wanted! 
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Jun 25 2004, 02:10 AM
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 × JeNi × Group: Member Posts: 32 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 23,307 |
ehh i can relate >.< nice poem btw =]
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Jun 25 2004, 08:37 PM
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QUOTE(lilangelgurlpnai @ Jun 23 2004, 11:13 AM) Because I love you. Love me back. At least talk to me. Pretend you care. But ignore my love. What I used to feel. I thought that as long as everything stayed the same, I'd stay happy. But I was wrong... |
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