untitled. poem., it`s the first i`ve really written in a while. |
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 Apr 3 2007, 12:29 PM
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 [BRITT;;]  Group: Member Posts: 764 Joined: Jul 2006 Member No: 433,210  |
yeah, idk.
april 1, 2007 my breathing is stopping so is my heartbeat my body`s giving up but maybe i don`t care my tears have ran out but my blood hasn`t an it still keeps pouring and maybe it`s satisfying because it honestly doesn`t hurt i`m too numb to feel what might hurt anyone else i disgusts myself every breath i take is like inhaling poison but it doesn`t kill me i wish it would |
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Apr 3 2007, 02:06 PM
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 fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
the question we ask afterward is, "why?"
I've read your piece several times.. for what it is, it is good. Very morbid, hopeless, apathetic.. i like that you didn't try to rhyme, you just let it go. |
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Apr 6 2007, 07:11 PM
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[BRITT;;] Group: Member Posts: 764 Joined: Jul 2006 Member No: 433,210 |
hm, thanks. i was expecting
worse critique on this one. ha. |
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