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 Feb 23 2007, 12:15 AM
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 Will write poetry for sex!  Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600  |
Wow, it's been quite a while.
Caffeine Monologue Sleep. My blackened escape Forever slumber of woes Mental shopping for blanketed fantasy, Checkout aisle for burdened journey. Sleep. Universe in my mind drowns in midnight coffee, Overflowing of discontent sugar And lazy cream riot interventions. Sleep. Fertilizer for a dream Provoked by sweet tale madness. Sleep. My artificial death. Sleep. Pseudo-suicide: the monster under my covers, Fear that kisses my eyelids open, Running an invisible race with no finish. Sleep. The letter I never receive, the heartache I never breathe, the air I couldn't choke, the struggle never ensued, the sex I never wrote, the right I never left, the insomnia I couldn't slumber. Sleep. The stranger I run awake to. |
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| *stephinika* |
Feb 23 2007, 12:21 AM
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Love it, love it, love it.
I suck at saying in-depth comments and whatnot, but I don't know...I like the repetition and the structure quite a bit and just the whole idea. Nice work. 
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| *Kathleen* |
Feb 23 2007, 11:48 AM
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Well, you already know that I oob this one so much that it's my favorite poem of yours.
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Feb 23 2007, 02:45 PM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
Wow, it has been a while.
Amazing. . breathtaking, and just . . raw. Loved it. |
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Feb 24 2007, 02:46 AM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
hmm...have you come back from the shadows? it's great, honestly unparallel to what i've been reading off of createblog, which consists of my own stuff and friend's stuff. i hope you still write, cuz you got mad talent for it.
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Feb 27 2007, 04:08 AM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Thanks for the comments, guys.
And yes, I have returned from the shadows. I can honestly say that it's good to be back. |
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Feb 27 2007, 07:07 PM
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 Newbie Group: Member Posts: 9 Joined: Feb 2007 Member No: 506,410 |
VERY nice!! love the format
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