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Just...A poem.
Pilgrim-Soul
post Aug 29 2006, 05:58 PM
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I THINK this is the right place to post this, please do tell me if I'm wrong.

This is a poem I wrote for my ex when we were going out, I wouldn't say it's my best poem, my best ones are in a very big paper pad in my room, but it's prolly the best one I have on my pc.

Her warm embrace and her smiling face.
Her gentle touch and her tender kiss.
I feel her fingers trace my lips.
I feel my hands run down her hips.
I hold her close as time stands still.
This is love…A rushing thrill.
A crystal drug, a lyrical wind.
Within temptation, a gentle sin.
We could fall to the sky.
Or crawl from the sea.
Whatever…
So long as you’re with me.
I love you.


Yeah...Opinions greatly appreciated =].
 
technicolour
post Aug 29 2006, 05:58 PM
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Hi. Interests >> Writing

Tons of writing there :)
 
goodcharlotte
post Aug 29 2006, 05:59 PM
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Yeah^
 
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post Aug 29 2006, 05:59 PM
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Aw. That's cute. Anyways, this goes in the Writing forums _smile.gif.
 
bballchick1
post Aug 29 2006, 06:02 PM
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Awww..I love that poem. It's really good. _smile.gif
 

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