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 Jun 11 2006, 04:42 PM
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 ||Leon/Silent W[hisper]|| Anime Freak  Group: Member Posts: 152 Joined: Oct 2005 Member No: 257,387  |
This is my poem i wrote for this girl i really like.
Everything I wanna be... I wanna see you smile I wanna hold you I wanna kiss you I wanna be your everything I wanna make you laugh I wanna hear your soft voice sing I wanna be your everything I wanna be with you I wanna hear you laugh I wanna be there for when you cry and be your pillow to lean on I wanna be your everything.. I wanna hear you say i love you I wanna hear you say i need you I wanna hear you say you are my everything I just wanna be your everything I wanna do all i can to see you happy I wanna do all i can to hear you call me baby I wanna be your everything |
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Jun 14 2006, 11:53 AM
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 Call me C.Annie Group: Member Posts: 366 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 115,994 |
Aww =] Thats adorable! Im sure she will love it! Nice job.
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Jun 14 2006, 11:56 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 2,614 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,903 |
That was cute :-)
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Jun 15 2006, 04:55 PM
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||Leon/Silent W[hisper]|| Anime Freak Group: Member Posts: 152 Joined: Oct 2005 Member No: 257,387 |
Thanks ^___^
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Jun 15 2006, 06:51 PM
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 daughter of sin Group: Member Posts: 1,653 Joined: Mar 2006 Member No: 386,134 |
Good idea, but too many "I wanna"s.. Too repetitive.
Taylor`` |
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Jun 15 2006, 06:54 PM
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I think the repetive part is what makes it stand out from the other poems. I think it is really sweet. I'm sure she will enjoy reading it.
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Jun 15 2006, 08:47 PM
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||Leon/Silent W[hisper]|| Anime Freak Group: Member Posts: 152 Joined: Oct 2005 Member No: 257,387 |
Thank you taylor and underestimated****
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