The One That Got Away, original poem |
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 Dec 28 2006, 07:28 PM
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 I've got ADD and magic markers. Oh the thrills I will have.  Group: Member Posts: 624 Joined: Jul 2006 Member No: 445,743  |
The One That Got Away
It’s pathetic how I lie here drowning in my tears wondering what’s wrong with me succumbing to my fears Oh no, you like another girl this must mean it’s the end The world should spin around you or so you comprehend Admit it, you thought I would die you thought that I would care You thought I’d try to look like her to be free from despair You thought that I would cry all night and pray that I’d be changed Did you think that I’d sell my soul? Well, you must be deranged So then, if you’re so horrible Why waste time feeling sad? So what, you’ve found an easy girl just begging to be had. I’ve seen the way you look at her I’ve heard the way she talks Who cares, you chose her over me it’s certainly your loss. How cute, you two have nicknames You two are just so sweet What’s that I see? You’re watching me be a bit less discreet You might as well admit it you like me, don’t you, mack? Too late, you let me get away and you won’t get me back |
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Dec 29 2006, 12:02 PM
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 Lose yourself and fly away, hide away for the day Group: Member Posts: 242 Joined: Jul 2006 Member No: 446,527 |
i cant believe no one replied to this! this is REALLY good.
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Dec 29 2006, 01:59 PM
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 daughter of sin Group: Member Posts: 1,653 Joined: Mar 2006 Member No: 386,134 |
Cute.
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Jan 10 2007, 07:28 PM
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I've got ADD and magic markers. Oh the thrills I will have. Group: Member Posts: 624 Joined: Jul 2006 Member No: 445,743 |
Thanks for your *cough*EXTREMELY POSITIVE*cough* feedback.
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Jan 10 2007, 11:39 PM
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 and so it is Group: Human Posts: 1,304 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,085 |
Looooooove it!
Seriously. I can't write poems if my life depended on it. Mine always sounds like some Dr. Seuss book. (as in it uses easy words with the same format and somewhat deranged topic) |
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Jan 12 2007, 05:43 PM
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I've got ADD and magic markers. Oh the thrills I will have. Group: Member Posts: 624 Joined: Jul 2006 Member No: 445,743 |
^Thanks for your feedback. And don't worry about the deranged topic thing--people LOVE deranged topics! :o)
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Jan 12 2007, 05:54 PM
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Newbie Group: Member Posts: 6 Joined: Jan 2007 Member No: 494,793 |
this is amazing .. i can really relate to it ... WONDERFUL !!! i love it !!
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Jan 14 2007, 05:18 PM
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I've got ADD and magic markers. Oh the thrills I will have. Group: Member Posts: 624 Joined: Jul 2006 Member No: 445,743 |
Amazing? You think so? Thanks!
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Jan 20 2007, 11:01 PM
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 ALLISON Group: Official Designer Posts: 3,372 Joined: Nov 2005 Member No: 310,259 |
haha..this is a great "payback" poem
i can imagine it as a great song :D |
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