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 Feb 16 2006, 01:14 AM
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 I just "got it like that".  Group: Member Posts: 247 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,238  |
a faint glare from far off
but not so far a touch through the screen straight to my heart shot through rock hard but how could this be? a few hours never meant so much to me exchanging stories without lies i can breath... take off my disguise and she didnt run rare occurences to see if only a mile were shorter id touch her back maybe we would fall in love its not so far to fall she said she'd catch me one less thing to worry but what now? love sees no age... will she see the hint? maybe this will scare her off if she reads it... if she sees it... but its too risky to not try once maybe she'll see me for who i am. |
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| *iNyCxShoRT* |
Feb 25 2006, 01:12 AM
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I don't quite get this one like I get the others. I like the ending.
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Feb 25 2006, 03:43 AM
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I just "got it like that". Group: Member Posts: 247 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,238 |
QUOTE(iNyCxShoRT @ Feb 25 2006, 1:12 AM)  I don't quite get this one like I get the others. I like the ending. Well, is about this girl that i met online. We talked forever, told secrets, stories, things that you could never tell someone face to face. We bonded. I started having feelings. But she lives so far away. I told her that I felt like I was constantly falling (cliche i know). And... she said that she would catch me. Now, with all of that in mind, re-read the poem. I think that it will make more sense now. 
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| *Blow_Don't_SUCK* |
Feb 25 2006, 03:47 AM
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QUOTE(razbus @ Feb 25 2006, 3:43 AM) Well, is about this girl that i met online. We talked forever, told secrets, stories, things that you could never tell someone face to face. We bonded. I started having feelings. But she lives so far away. I told her that I felt like I was constantly falling (cliche i know). And... she said that she would catch me. Now, with all of that in mind, re-read the poem. I think that it will make more sense now. I see. The first few lines lost the story. It sounded like you were desperately trying to sound profound. |
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Feb 26 2006, 12:21 AM
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 "lal! laugh a little!" Group: Member Posts: 192 Joined: Jan 2006 Member No: 364,863 |
Oooh...it was weird, I kept on thinking at the end that it needed something, just one freaking little word to make it perfect...when I find it I'll get back to you...
--->Sierra uggh...whats a word, that means you want to give something back? Like...like...like....AAAAAAAAAGGGGGH this is driving me absolutely NUTSO!! AAGGGGGGGGGGH!! YES! YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YESSSSS!!!!!!!!!!! I GOT IT I GOT IT!! Something like reply...I don't know...because you reply with computers, and when you reply, something has given something to you and you're going to give something back... d*mmit I forgot the actual 3 words....grawr I will go slit my wrists...and right after I'll finally think of it, and pounce on the computer so I don't forget... Ugh...More than a reply...that sounds more like a title to me... d*mmit I can only think of titles |
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| *ranniel* |
Mar 1 2006, 08:06 PM
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this is some good writing. it's very abstract and original.
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