A Broken Heart |
 Jan 13 2006, 07:10 PM
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 Koorime  Group: Member Posts: 153 Joined: Sep 2005 Member No: 237,135  |
I wrote this one Tuesday. I just started and couldn't stop until i was finished.
A Broken Heart The tears stream down my face As I look at your retreating form You say It can never work out That we can never be together Why did you lead me on? Why did you make me think you had feelings for me? I've come to accept your love of my twin and my one true best friend But your betrayal is something I cannot forgive. My feelings for you are slowly turning to Hatred. |
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| *Zatanna* |
Jan 13 2006, 07:28 PM
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:( Lovely poem though. I like how you capitalized "It". I so can relate to this.
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Jan 14 2006, 02:51 AM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
Wow...I could relate to this back in my 8th grade year. *flashbacks*
I think you did a great job, and yah sometimes the writing just flows, i know what you mean. You write, and can't stop until it's finished. Two thumbs up :) Don't stop writing |
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Jan 14 2006, 08:14 AM
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i can totally relate
i like it its pretty damn good |
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Jan 14 2006, 09:24 PM
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 some reason i feel alone...guess cus my true self is never shown Group: Member Posts: 303 Joined: Sep 2005 Member No: 246,804 |
its good and i can relate......i think mainly everyone can relate so it might be shown a diffrent message to others
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Jan 15 2006, 06:23 PM
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Koorime Group: Member Posts: 153 Joined: Sep 2005 Member No: 237,135 |
I'm glad that you like it. Sometimes when I think of what happened to me or a close friend in the in past, a poem pops up and I can't help but write it down on paper.
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