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A Story, An odd sort of love story
Sa-Chan
post Apr 30 2004, 10:43 PM
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This'll be slow to begin with and I'll need help in finding a title but I hope you enjoy...




Vague Emotion




Prologue:



She hunched her shoulder and let out a small sigh. Her feelings had been hurt time and time again this week and she was losing it for her sure. She had failed her latest science test, been sent to the office for chewing gum, and now she had found out her boyfriend had taken another girl to prom. How could anything get worse?

She reclined slightly on the couch; punk rock was playing from two different stereos, both turned up as loud as they could be. For some reason noise had always soothed her. She could hear the faint ringing of the phone; it had been going on and on with it's annoying little tone for the last two hours...signaling to her that he was trying to call her again.

She didn't even bother to pick the phone up. What would be the point? He would only grovel, and whine; tell her how much he loved her, missed her...wished she had been there. He would deny that he had fooled around with the girl, he would call the three witnesses, that had seen him and his prom date kiss, liars. The conversation would end in an argument and one of them would hang up on the other...then the tears would start again.

She knew this was how it would end up. They argued so much. She wished they didn't, because deep down she really did love him, but lately she saw no real reason to be with him. He had once made her so happy. She thought back to their first real date. It had been after hours on the beach. She had just laid peacefully in his arms, staring up at the night sky and all her troubles had melted away.

How she longed with all her heart that those times would come back. She wanted so badly to pick up the phone and be comforted by those three words he would utter, 'I love you...'. Even if it was a lie, even if he was only saying that because he needed to be in a relationship and in some sick way he needed her...she wanted to hear him say those words more than anything...

The last song on the track ended leaving her all alone with the loud ringing of the telephone. She tried to block it out. Another memory came back to her. Valentine's day, it had been four days before they had begun going out...four days... She had been his Valentine, they had stayed up all night on the phone together, laughing and talking about nothing and yet everything all at once.

Over those next few days he had hinted heavily at how much he liked her; she had hinted back. Suddenly she let out a soft giggle, it had been the first laugh she had given in a long time. Another memory, the day he asked her out, February 18, she remembered his telling her that he had asked her two bestfriend's permission first. It had been so cute...so kind...

He had by far been her best boyfriend, and she loved him...she truly loved him. Her bestfriend had told her to give her boyfriend a break to talk to him and see what he had to say... Maybe he was right.

She grabbed the phone from the hook quickly.

"H-Hello?" Her voice was a soft quiver, she could hear the tears in her voice, but she tried to remain composed.

"I...didn't think you would pick up," His very voice made her heart leap slightly, and then drop to her stomach.

"I don't know why I did," she replied softly, yet dangerously.

"Don't listen to them...you have to understand...I would never hurt you..." His voice rang loud and clear, and for some reason the very words that were meant to help her...hurt her worse...




Author's Note: Okay, that was the prologue, if you guys like this I'll write Chapter One. It will take place in the future (about two months later). We will find out what happen to the two and how they are doing (as well as find out their names). Also, this is not all a sappy love story it's an adventure that will take place and challenge the heroine's psyche as well as her body..
 

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Sa-Chan   A Story   Apr 30 2004, 10:43 PM
Sa-Chan   QUOTE(ComradeRed @ May 26 2004, 11:05 AM)Stil...   May 26 2004, 01:47 PM
ComradeRed   QUOTE(Sa-Chan @ May 26 2004, 1:47 PM)Rea...   May 26 2004, 02:32 PM
NiteSerpent   it didn't end yet...... at least I hope it did...   May 26 2004, 05:36 PM
ComradeRed   QUOTE(NiteSerpent @ May 26 2004, 5:36 PM)it d...   May 26 2004, 05:40 PM
NiteSerpent   i know you wrote an alternate ending, but there ha...   May 27 2004, 08:01 PM
juliar   It's an alternate ending because obviously tha...   May 29 2004, 12:33 PM
Sa-Chan   Chapter 10: This is dedicated to my friend Mariel ...   May 29 2004, 06:04 PM
ThePrincessofTKD   awww...thanks savannah!!! so sweet of ...   May 30 2004, 02:27 AM
juliar   So she's going with Lucien to fight Vega's...   May 30 2004, 08:24 AM
shortie09   keep going! ahh, such an interesting story.. ...   May 30 2004, 09:20 AM
Sa-Chan   QUOTE(juliar @ May 30 2004, 8:24 AM)So she...   May 30 2004, 11:56 AM
juliar   I get so irritated when I know something in the st...   May 30 2004, 04:10 PM
LatinaLady   wow that was good keep writing =) nice job   May 30 2004, 06:32 PM
ThePrincessofTKD   QUOTE(juliar @ May 30 2004, 4:10 PM)I get so ...   May 30 2004, 09:43 PM
PunkRocker315   DAMN that was a good chapter!!!...   Jun 3 2004, 11:58 PM
Sa-Chan   Chapter Eleven: Lucien opened his eyes. The wor...   Jun 4 2004, 11:27 AM
juliar   QUOTE(ThePrincessofTKD @ May 30 2004, 10:43 P...   Jun 4 2004, 05:55 PM
Sa-Chan   Okay, I have the last Chapter and the Epilogue wri...   Jun 5 2004, 11:13 AM
orlando_bloom_luva   your getting your belly button peirced i dont li...   Jun 5 2004, 01:14 PM
Sa-Chan   Okay, I'm back, and in pain ;_; And feeling sp...   Jun 5 2004, 08:18 PM
juliar   Wait...who is "I" in the story? Lucien? ...   Jun 5 2004, 08:28 PM
Sa-Chan   QUOTE(juliar @ Jun 5 2004, 8:28 PM)Wait...who...   Jun 5 2004, 09:29 PM
shortie09   wow. that was a great ending. i think i've r...   Jun 5 2004, 09:51 PM
Sa-Chan   I wanted to go ahead and say something. About the...   Jun 6 2004, 08:34 PM
ComradeRed   You stole my part about the girl getting shot... o...   Jun 6 2004, 08:53 PM
ComradeRed   You stole my part about the girl getting shot... o...   Jun 6 2004, 08:55 PM
Sa-Chan   QUOTE(ComradeRed @ Jun 6 2004, 8:55 PM)You st...   Jun 7 2004, 12:21 AM
rdngurl0107   wow~very descriptive and sort of emotional~i like ...   Jun 7 2004, 07:32 AM
PunkRocker315   wow! that was good..i didnt expect it to end l...   Jun 28 2004, 11:58 PM
swe3txprincesz   awww you should reallie think of geing yur writing...   Jun 29 2004, 12:27 PM
jooleeah   nice story. the ending was a little confusing, but...   Jun 30 2004, 05:07 PM
kyuubi319   oh wow... i love that story... its so good!...   Jul 7 2004, 11:25 AM
Sa-Chan   Okay, guys, I was thinking about starting a new st...   Jul 7 2004, 11:58 PM
Foolish Heart   I love the whole story. But the ending, I don...   Jul 19 2004, 09:36 PM
chaotic_kitt   when i read the first chapter i was soo shocked...   Jul 24 2004, 01:49 AM
oOjenniOo   that was nice =] but truthfully...i didnt like th...   Jul 27 2004, 07:14 PM
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