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 Nov 2 2004, 12:42 AM
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Eternal Syn  Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000  |
No matter how far apart
You’ll always be in heart But I want be able to cuddle with you all night Cause just being with you takes me to new heights Being with you gives me much ecstasy I hope you’ll change your mind and stay with me Don’t ever go; stay by my side If you do go; my feelings will for you bide Why are you so hesitant to answer me Don't you understand; I want you to stay my little bumblebee Again with they silence…I must ask why Is this your way of saying good-bye…? The bumblebee part is just an inside joke..don't ask about it. |
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Nov 2 2004, 12:53 AM
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 LunchboxXx Group: Member Posts: 1,789 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,810 |
aaw... that's sad
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Nov 2 2004, 01:08 AM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
You really think my poem is sad?
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Nov 3 2004, 05:03 PM
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 Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Hrm, maybe you should keep working on this one.
Seems like you just threw in any line in order to keep the rhyme going. |
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Nov 4 2004, 11:29 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
To tell you the truth, I wasn't feelin` this poem at all. It does seemed forced, I just haven't been very inspired lately. This was my least favorite one that I made.
~Nguyen |
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