Because I Said No... Abuse Poem, Please Enjoy. |
Because I Said No... Abuse Poem, Please Enjoy. |
*swtcherriipie* |
Apr 2 2006, 06:36 PM
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This is my most sentimental peice, i wrote this after watching the movie MONSTER. Please rate it on a scale of 1-10. Thank You.
I'm shaking and beaten Cold and near dead I step in the shower And the water runs red I take in this feeling But water can't clean me Not this I feel dirty all over It won't wash away I scrub and I scrub But the feeling, it stays The burning memory What you did And it's wrong I dress to go to bed But I stay up all night long Sleep comes in the morning With you haunting my dreams The fear in my heart And your angers all I see I walk down the street And I wonder Can anyone see? Can they tell what I've been through? Do they know what has been? Or are they happy, ignorant? Just like me, before that night... I said no And I can still feel you on me And it burns, it burns Like the tears in my dry eyes I can still hear you yelling Because I said no I can still hear you laughing About how far I wouldn't go And I can still feel the pain You said I deserved it Because I said no And you pinned me down Because I said no You wanted more Because I said no I said no I had my innocence But you took it away Because I said no You ripped my heart away My life is so confusing I can't say what I'll do You're in my life, my memories It makes every day hard And that night, forever Is eternalized in scars |
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Apr 2 2006, 07:07 PM
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Whatever lies beyond this morning is a little later on Group: Member Posts: 157 Joined: Mar 2006 Member No: 389,260 |
It's okay. Your rhyming was okay too.
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Apr 2 2006, 11:31 PM
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dakishimetainoni... Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 4,322 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 75,318 |
I think it's good. It captured my attention and made me feel what you wrote. 7.5
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*My Cinderella.* |
Apr 3 2006, 05:11 PM
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I like it a lot. The rhyming adds a great touch.
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*swtcherriipie* |
Apr 3 2006, 05:14 PM
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Why thank you. Its an english homework due in 1 week
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