My once ago friend, A poem that I wrote |
My once ago friend, A poem that I wrote |
Feb 20 2010, 10:39 AM
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"One hell of a butler" Group: Member Posts: 95 Joined: Nov 2008 Member No: 696,422 |
This is a poem that I wrote for Creative Writing I, last semester. It is going to get published in this laureate magazine at my school.
My Once Ago Friend As I picked up a lonely flower from the earth I thoughtfully pulled a delicate petal As I was doing so, I reminisced over you My once ago friend who vanished With no farewell leaving me behind To sink to drown in my memories Of your existence My once ago friend, I thought of you As if you were greater than a field of gold I would swim in the deepest ocean To keep the closeness between us My once ago friend I smiled for you Even though you cared for me weakly In return for my kindness to you --- As I came back to reality The wind began to blow swiftly Causing my delicate petal to drift away Leaving me behind as I watched it Move on neglecting the past I now realized that I should do the same |
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Feb 20 2010, 12:44 PM
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Senior Member Group: Official Member Posts: 1,938 Joined: Jul 2008 Member No: 667,832 |
This is really nice
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Feb 20 2010, 03:30 PM
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"One hell of a butler" Group: Member Posts: 95 Joined: Nov 2008 Member No: 696,422 |
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Feb 24 2010, 01:34 AM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 295 Joined: May 2007 Member No: 521,658 |
this is not one of those poems you say is good just to be nice, it really is good. keep up the awesome writing
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Feb 24 2010, 03:06 PM
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"One hell of a butler" Group: Member Posts: 95 Joined: Nov 2008 Member No: 696,422 |
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Feb 28 2010, 12:19 AM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
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Feb 28 2010, 08:57 AM
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"One hell of a butler" Group: Member Posts: 95 Joined: Nov 2008 Member No: 696,422 |
Thanks! =D
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Mar 31 2010, 05:29 PM
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CheccMate Foo! Group: Member Posts: 839 Joined: Dec 2006 Member No: 487,531 |
I really like this poem!! I just made one that's kinda similar to this but it's more dramatic cuz I'm into spoken word. But kudos!!
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