Lonely Heart, Another poem |
Lonely Heart, Another poem |
Sep 16 2004, 03:07 PM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
Another Poem I wrote...
The life of a lonely heart whose love was torn apart Living life with only tears To love one now being a fear the memories of smiling knowing all of it was lying the laughter you thought that will never end the day came when she said lets be friends afraid to open to new people Ignoring them was thought of as simple Never loving another |
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Sep 16 2004, 11:11 PM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Hmm, Rather well done, Especially considering that the poem rhymes. I never favored rhyming, Since I felt it deprived me from complete freedom.
I like your style and rhythmn, It makes one pause and think after each line. |
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Sep 16 2004, 11:13 PM
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freedom Group: Member Posts: 844 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 31,358 |
Wow! Makes me feel lonely. Its a very good poem. Something alot of people can relate to.
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Sep 17 2004, 01:25 PM
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creepy heather Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580 |
it's a really simply rhyme, i didn't like too much. i sugest being more creative and unique with it
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Oct 5 2004, 05:46 PM
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don't worry, be happy~ Group: Member Posts: 1,538 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 15,899 |
nice!!! i smiled when i read that poem.
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