Black Rose, [Poem] |
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 Aug 31 2008, 02:52 AM
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 Onen i-Estel Edain, ú-chebin estel anim.  Group: Official Designer Posts: 425 Joined: May 2008 Member No: 653,128  |
I am like a black rose
Beautiful in all its right But people label it and Call it wrong Its thorns that rip and tear Are only windows to its soul Its silky petals that are its outside Only hides its true insides I am like a black rose Often misunderstood... |
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Jan 20 2009, 12:12 AM
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 DDR \\ I'm Dee :) Group: Mentor Posts: 8,662 Joined: Mar 2006 Member No: 384,020 |
QUOTE(xzkdxrawrx @ Aug 31 2008, 01:52 AM)  I am like a black rose Beautiful in all its right But people label it and Call it wrong Its thorns that rip and tear Are only windows to its soul Its silky petals that are its outside Only hides its true insides I am like a black rose Often misunderstood... Confusing. People label a rose? It doesn't have much depth, if you're going to add misunderstanding to the end of the poem, you should at least elude to it through the... stanzas (if they should be called that here). For the second line "Beautiful in it's own right" would make more sense. 
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