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paternal love, english short story
teeners4
post Feb 9 2005, 09:49 PM
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yep in english class we have to write a short story. i know my idea, but i dont know how to develop it. here's the meat of it.

17 year old girl. her mom had her when she was 16. so her moms only 33. and her mom is dating a man who is 30. the man has the hots for the girl. i know it's a bit disturbing, but i want a twisted story. and then i dont know how to start a conflict here and start the relationship between the man and the girl. but in the end. the mom goes with the man and thinks her daughter is crazy so sends her to a doctor. and then the girl packs her things and just starts walking. so it's kinda indeterminate. i want the audience to think "is the girl crazy or was the man interested in her?"

but i dont know what events to put in the middle.

any help?
 
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post Feb 9 2005, 10:38 PM
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relationship between the man and the girl:
1) said the man look like one of the kpop she like all her life. Like se7en or something. And when they first mean she thoz he is se7en.

2) said her dad die at age of 10 and she love her dad. and this guy resemble characteristic like her dad.


wait do this story the man and the girl have no problem liking each other and make love with each other?
 
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uhh i think my teacher said keep pg 13. if not i would do that.
 
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post Feb 10 2005, 12:27 AM
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You could have him approach her with sexual innuendos without having to go into detail about what he really means, and when the girl had enough and turns him down, he becomes abusive (so you don't have to write just about sexual encounters)? Then when she tries to tell her Mom, she gets sent to the doctor?
 
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post Feb 14 2005, 04:26 PM
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well maybe, to start the relationship with the girl & they man, maybe she can catch him going through her things, or dropping hints that he likes they girl when they are home alone together???
 
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post Feb 15 2005, 01:01 AM
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lol. i saw a movie on lifetime that was just like this...except the mom wasn't young.
anyhoo...how about have the guy approach the girl, and the girl gets upset, so she tells the mom about it, but the mom doesn't believe her because the mom thinks the girl just dislikes the guy?
 

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