my poems, i have diff ones |
 Jan 9 2005, 08:00 PM
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 Senior Member  Group: Member Posts: 1,220 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 81,808  |
ok these are the poems i made up while i was feelin down and stuff..tell me what you think...there not the kind that rymes and stuff..i think ..just check it...
---> True Friends shyt coming and going Passing behind your back Not knowing whats coming up.. Is jus as rare…. Kuz people be telling u Whats going on Knowin who ya true friends are “THE TRUTH HURTS” MY LIFE IS A LIE I JUS WANNA CRY THIS SIGNIFIES THAT I DON’T WANT TO LIVE MY LIFE MY WAY [BUT GOD’S WAY] IS JUST A WASTE A TIME BECUZ THE TRUTH HURTS [CANT STAND IT] CANT STAND THA DRAMA, CANT STAND THA PAiiN CANT STAND THA PE0PLE, CANT TAKE THA BLAME, CANT STAND THA STRESSiiN iiN MAH LiiFE , THA LiiES THAT PE0PLE MAKE WEN PE0PLE MAKE MiSTAKEZ CANT STAND iiT N0 MO, N0 M0, N0 MO…” he Im sayin hi, he jus says goodbye he poppin a lip, im closin my eyes im sayin good bye, he juz walks away he hollerin at her, i shed a tear im acting sad, hes always there he acting cold, my hands feel bare im actin moody, he [sometimes] actin a kid he actin funny, i smile, wut i did is wut i did. 
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Jan 10 2005, 01:15 AM
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 LunchboxXx Group: Member Posts: 1,789 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,810 |
you've got the heart, you just don't got the soul
er... you've got the soul, you just don't got the heart no... you've got the heart and the soul, you just don't got the paitience. yea! that's it! it's nice that there were 4 of them, but they were way too short. and rhyming helps. |
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Jan 11 2005, 05:52 PM
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Brie Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 10,172 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,548 |
Shouldn't poems be typed correctly?
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Jan 11 2005, 06:59 PM
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 i'm susan Group: Official Member Posts: 13,875 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 5,029 |
like brie said, anyways...
all of your poem was very bad. not just the spelling and grammars correction, but it didnt sound like a POEM at all. As if, you just made up random words... |
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