The Actions of Everyday Life, poem we can all relate |
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 Nov 19 2004, 09:29 PM
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 THE ACTIONS OF EVERYDAY LIFE ~ Put on a fake smile, it won't hurt, Even though your life is a joke to others, and I did everything I can to make it stop, but it didn't work. They all worship their conformity, Popularity is their only greed. Leave me be in my corner. Let me escape the taunting from the ones more popular. Allow me to cry in my pillow at night, The stars lied to me when I wished upon it's light. May my flesh be torn with a sigh of relief, With knife in hand dripping with the blood that created me. What a miserable life I lead, The wounds never heal, and it still continues to bleed, And when knife and skin is isn't enough, Social suicide can always be considered a must. When the gun is pointed to my head, Then everyone at school actually look back at what they did, Only to shrug their shoulders, and going back to bullying more kids. And as the gunshots rang out, with me falling on the floor with out a doubt. No one cared, only to hear cheerleaders jump and cheer aloud. What do you think..? |
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Nov 19 2004, 09:33 PM
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 --*WoAh Group: Member Posts: 67 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 63,517 |
....Ohh, It's sad.
 But good. Nice job.
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Nov 19 2004, 09:45 PM
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 xinistical member Group: Member Posts: 123 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,328 |
i agree w/ ur poem...wait, is it a poem? sorri...it's harder to identify poetry when it doesn't rhyme or w/e...i'm just being an idiot now. anyways, i agree w/ what u wrote. there. lmao.
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Nov 20 2004, 12:54 AM
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 hi, my name is brianna! =] Group: Official Member Posts: 5,764 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 22,114 |
Touching yet powerful. =]
I think you should fix some things THE ACTIONS OF EVERYDAY LIFE ~ Put on a fake smile, it won't hurt, I think you should fix these linesEven though your life is a joke to others, and I did everything I can to make it stop, but it didn't work. They all worship their conformity, Popularity is their only greed. Leave me be in my corner. Stops hereLet me escape the taunting from the ones more popular. Allow me to cry in my pillow at night, The stars lied to me when I wished upon it's light. May my flesh be torn with a sigh of relief, With knife in hand dripping with the blood that created me. What a miserable life that I lead, The wounds never heal, and it still continues to bleed, And when knife and skin just isn't enough, Social suicide can always be considered a must. When the gun is pointed to my head, Then everyone at school actually look back at what they did, Only to shrug their shoulders, and going back to bullying more kids. And as the gunshots rang out, with me falling on the floor with out a doubt. No one cared, only to hear cheerleaders jump and cheer aloud. Hope you don't mind. >< But all in all, it's a really good poem. |
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Nov 23 2004, 09:31 PM
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catastrophic sweetness Group: Member Posts: 92 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 58,334 |
Verrry good. I can relate also.
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Dec 16 2004, 11:14 AM
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the sad thing is is that this whole poem is true......the bullying and suicide....but thats how our world works
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Dec 16 2004, 03:26 PM
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 my <3 is in Ohio Group: Member Posts: 899 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,599 |
its sad...i can relate to it...you did a good job
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