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 Oct 22 2004, 10:50 PM
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 Kids.Have.All.The.Fun  Group: Member Posts: 228 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 33,943  |
this just randomely came out of my head [lol] obviously i dont usually write poems, or much of anything.. hince it not being very good. dont say anything mean, that'd be much appreciated.
-Live To Bleed- she shot her hands into the sky begged aloud 'lord let me die' dripping blood off her wrists landed lightly on her lips tears ran fast down her cheek she felt so cold, utterly weak looked to the left then to the ground grabbed the knife without a sound she cried once more, a final pleed 'God help me please, i live to bleed' ©-Me |
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Oct 24 2004, 01:19 PM
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 creepy heather Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580 |
whoa...that was very powerful..i had the whole image in my head
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Oct 24 2004, 09:28 PM
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 hi, my name is brianna! =] Group: Official Member Posts: 5,764 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 22,114 |
Yeah, it was very powerful. You could imagine everything almost perfectly.
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Oct 24 2004, 10:12 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
powerful stuff i agree
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Oct 24 2004, 10:41 PM
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 Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Short and drives the point straight on through...well done.
I think this is one of the first poems here that has ever mentioned the Lord/God. |
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