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Mannequin
dreamerOi
post Oct 21 2004, 03:46 AM
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I wrote this tonight at 2 am haha. i just wrote it while i was waiting for my drunk family to come back. because i cant sleep if im alone. yea weird. anyways. it seems i dno incomplete or seomthing.


"Mannequin"

I'm a mannequin
Powerless; strength gone& body unrecognized
I am supported by a metal stand
with nothing at hand

I am belittled
Speechless; voice unknown& unheard
I witness every motion
without reaction

I have no human aspects
Emotionless; heart torn& no pain
I don't express joy
neither do i enrich in agony

I'm a mannequin
Powerless; no flesh& no skin
I am not a human
I am a mannequin
 
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post Oct 21 2004, 06:05 AM
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I like how you made the comparison of yourself to a Mannequin.
Qualities that you see in yourself, that apply accordingly.
It only kicked in for me in the 2nd stanza
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I am belittled
Speechless; voice unknown& unheard
I witness every motion
without reaction

Pretty good. _smile.gif
 
fairy_princess
post Oct 21 2004, 07:18 AM
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Oooh me gusta mucho! happy.gif yeah 2nd stanza was awesome>> i witness every motion, without reaction....koolies!!!

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dreamerOi
post Oct 22 2004, 12:11 AM
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hahaa. my frieend liked that part too. hhaa
 
ryfitaDF
post Oct 24 2004, 12:42 AM
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that's pretty clever, yo
 
Ekay
post Oct 24 2004, 12:55 AM
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Very good.
 
dreamerOi
post Oct 24 2004, 02:07 AM
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thanks a bunch
 

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