suicide, tell me wat u think!! |
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 Oct 22 2004, 01:16 AM
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the...bob  Group: Member Posts: 15 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 57,486  |
ok im not depressed or nething but i was really mad wen i wrote this ok:
suicide: i cannot live i cannot die i cannot cease the flow of time so i pass, from one plane to another its not your fault, dear mother and father i leave you now with this note of despair i feel it now the hands of death always and forever,cold and bare so now i lie at the foot of my bed, the blood flowing freely from my head critisims is required!! i INSIST |
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Oct 23 2004, 02:43 AM
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 Can't have the hand without the cock. Group: Member Posts: 2,481 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 50,622 |
sounds like teen angst. Lol.
Its not bad, but its not good. Dont know what else to say.. |
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Oct 23 2004, 02:53 AM
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 I'm The True Reality Group: Member Posts: 39 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 56,828 |
don't commit suicide
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Oct 23 2004, 11:20 AM
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the...bob Group: Member Posts: 15 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 57,486 |
haahaa! ok im NOT gunna commit suicide, i just liked that theme wen the words came into my mind, i just wrote w/e came and this poem is wat came. so like lol....dun get freaked, *EVERYONE I SHOW THIS TOO GETS FREAKED LOL*
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Oct 24 2004, 12:28 AM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
It's odd...I will say that. This is what I think, From my head, should be one line. Everything else I think is fine.
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Oct 24 2004, 09:17 AM
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 can't believe I let people call me Lynne on here 5 yrs ago o Group: Member Posts: 243 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 54,591 |
its pretty good, i think
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Oct 24 2004, 10:01 AM
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that's nice
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