True Love, not exactly but do you catch my drift?;) |
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Eternal Syn  Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000  |
You're my True Love
It's as if you came from above You're the only one with the keys to my heart I can't stand it when we're apart You're the one that lights up my day Whenever I see you smile my way You're the one love of my life, you're my boo And soon my Love for you grew And as you see My joy and glee Revolves around you Is this true for you too? This poem took me 2 hours to rhyme... 
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Sep 30 2004, 07:30 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
wow 2 hours umm nice job though but 2 hours WHOAH heheh if u stick here long enough youd be writing poems in seconds
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Sep 30 2004, 07:37 PM
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 Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
2 hours?! Sheezus.
Haha, 'Boo'...I can't believe you actually used that. Erg, Nig words shuck. Another poem that can pull off as a song. |
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Sep 30 2004, 07:41 PM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
i say good job but 2 hours.. goodness
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Sep 30 2004, 09:49 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
Well it took me a while to think of a word that rhymes with life. It was strife, wife, and knife. Those didn't seem to fit with the kind of poem I was making. So I had to think of another word. Basically I got stuck with rhyming life.
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Sep 30 2004, 09:53 PM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Then don't rhyme at all.
Why struggle so hard? It's your writing, why need to follow any guidelines but your own? Unless you're bent for rhymes. |
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Sep 30 2004, 09:54 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
rhyming life lol i get that too im stuck with strife wife and knife and if u read my other poems posted here i used it like this
You're the one love of my life without you itd hurt like i was cut by a knife u see lol spend more time here and learn |
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Sep 30 2004, 10:54 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
lol but I wanted something to sound good. Something with love. I didn't see how knife could fit into this.
 ::edit:: Well I kno it's my writing but I like how rhyming makes it flow. So that's why i spent a while on this one. |
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Sep 30 2004, 11:17 PM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
If you can't find a rhyme for a word, Then just try and work your way around it. Change the first word (In this case, 'life') or whole sentence completely. I'm sure there are other alternatives that carry the same message/meaning. Also, there are synonyms out there, people.
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Sep 30 2004, 11:29 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
You've got a point..I guess I was stressin on trying to find rhymes I didn't really think about that option.
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Sep 30 2004, 11:31 PM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Hey, no prob, we do it all the time, right?
Well, glad that I helped. -Joe |
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Sep 30 2004, 11:33 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
Yeah..Thanks for the help tho man. I really appriciate it.
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Sep 30 2004, 11:41 PM
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 ilikeyouSofreakingmuch. Group: Member Posts: 2,014 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 643 |
Nice poem. Jez remember not everything has to rhyme :] ... just write frmo your heart.
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Sep 30 2004, 11:43 PM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
i try not to use rhymes anymore.. seems more like free write that way..
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Sep 30 2004, 11:43 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
hehehe. Thanks for the input.
 I have written ones that don't rhyme but I didn't really like those. So I just started to try and rhyme.
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Oct 1 2004, 08:32 AM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
yeah i try not to rhyme too but still a habit in me
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Oct 1 2004, 02:39 PM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
QUOTE(Cloud_X @ Sep 30 2004, 8:43 PM) hehehe. Thanks for the input. I have written ones that don't rhyme but I didn't really like those. So I just started to try and rhyme.Hey, whatever works for you. It's your writing, you should be comfortable with it. |
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