my love poem |
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my love poem |
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 ![]() |
we both sit next to each other in the still of the night
saying these words everything will be alright the moon shined down on us there was a sparkle in your eye it was tears falling down your face you started to cry i held u tight to be next to you telling the whole world how much i love you u smiled back at me with that look on ur face i told u baybee no one can ever take yur place its hard for me to explain cuz i love u so much but its that kinda love no one can touch i promise someday it will be me and you till then im always loving you i like writing but i dunno why i cant write an essay or get good grades in english geez lol |
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![]() Will write poetry for sex! ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 ![]() |
Ah, yet another love poem....
For one, Welcome to the forums. Two, the reason why you don't do well with essays and whatnot may be because it's controlled - there are guidelines to follow. With your own writing, there aren't any boundaries, and it's your own emotions being translated into pen on paper. You're more comfortable with it, and the writing flows through much easier. |
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 ![]() |
hehe thnx for advice man ima use it
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SOS Brigade!! ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 ![]() |
master is ruler of writing +P
haha nice one loved it |
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 ![]() |
thnx yeh he got a point i dont very much use the guidelines im more of a free kinda writer person like write stuff outta mah head
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SOS Brigade!! ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 ![]() |
same i hate writing to a like guideline.. like 8 sentences per paragraph... who the heck cares its your writing =P
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#7
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 ![]() |
lol yeah i agree with you on that i hate rules to writing
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SOS Brigade!! ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 ![]() |
omg thank god sometimes when we free write for poems... NO PERIODS!!!! RAWR
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 ![]() |
LMAO yes well heres another poem
hmm a poem outta the blue i opened my eyes and started to see i realized what a person i came out to be im sorry if things didnt go our way no matter what i did u still drifted away i thought i could finally see the right road to take but everything fell down and it started to break now i fall down and beg on my knees just another chance before you leave how much i need you to hold and to love just to let everyone know your my angel, the gift from above |
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SOS Brigade!! ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 ![]() |
oo was that a quickie?
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 ![]() |
yep a quickie
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 ![]() |
another poem enjoy
why do i pretend its all okay is it because i ran out of the words to say why do i choke at the site of your name is it me or are u feeling the same why do i feel like i have to cry is it because i still wanna try why do i still feel so much pain is it because i lost u and i have nothing to gain why am i feeling so down and gone away is it because i still think of you everyday why do i feel that theres something u should know is it becuase i still havent let you go why cant i realize that your already gone its cuz im still feeling for you and im holding on |
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#13
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 ![]() |
poem fantic srry
i thought it was right to be with you i guess everything messed up when i said i love you now we dont talk and met our seperate ways the feeling is dead,its gone, it died away i thought i gave up cuz i lost you its just we had our own problems and didnt make it through i wont say it was wasted love that we had its just the decisions i made u didnt like and it all went bad u started to hate me for just one thing when i broke your heart u hated everything i never intended to make u feel that way i tried hard and hard to make evrything stay now my trying didnt go so well it ended up in chaos and sent me through hell but all that stuff is all in the past ill remember everything even what happened last when u moved on i couldnt handle the pain this is how i put it the way i would explain |
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SOS Brigade!! ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 ![]() |
lolz nice poems but just make new topics for each!!!!!
tripple post uh OH!! |
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![]() Will write poetry for sex! ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 ![]() |
Haha, Thanks for the comment about me being the 'ruler of writing.' I'm flattered.
Boy, you two should be getting along pretty well - Both of you write based on similar subjects. I've only posted ONE piece related to love. Most likely the last one as well. Here's the link for 'dispn0y'...I know you've already seen this one, rainnydaiis... My only love piece |
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*wind&fire* |
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"i told u baybee no one can ever take yur place"
not that im a critic or sumthin but i think that line has to many syalbles(sp) it disrupts the flow.... but i love your poems!!!! |
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this is my love poem.......
I think about your face, And how I fall into your eyes The outline that I trace Around the one that I call mine Time that called for space Unclear where you drew the line I don't need to solve this case And I don't need to look behind Close my eyes Let the whole thing pass me by There is no time To waste asking why So I'll run away with you by my side I need to let go of this pride Until this echo in my mind Before this echo can subside Do I expect to change The past I hold inside With all the words I say Repeating over in my mind Some things you can't erase No matter how hard you try An exit to escape Is all there is left to find |
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![]() Newbie ![]() Group: Member Posts: 6 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,313 ![]() |
heres another one......
I asked him if he likes me, he said no. I asked him if he thinks im pretty, he said no. I asked him if he would cry if i walked away, he said no. So i turned around and he grabbed my arm and said, "I don't like you, I love you." "You're not pretty, you're beautiful." "I wouldn't die if you walked away, I would die." |
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![]() creepy heather ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580 ![]() |
QUOTE(pinksparkliefire @ Sep 27 2004, 4:30 PM) heres another one...... I asked him if he likes me, he said no. I asked him if he thinks im pretty, he said no. I asked him if he would cry if i walked away, he said no. So i turned around and he grabbed my arm and said, "I don't like you, I love you." "You're not pretty, you're beautiful." "I wouldn't die if you walked away, I would die." this one isn't yours...next time you should credit the author |
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 ![]() |
true i heard the same b4 too
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![]() Will write poetry for sex! ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 ![]() |
Makes me question whether or not the first one you posted is in fact yours.
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![]() I'm not crazy.. ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 52 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 50,670 ![]() |
Nice poem~
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