the breakup, ...poemness... |
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 Aug 5 2004, 11:35 PM
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Senior Member  Group: Member Posts: 646 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 30,847  |
uhh yeah i wrote this right after me and my ex broke up...for once its 100% true, nothing stretched for the sake of drama. i think thats the scariest part. anyways onto the poem:
"I don't love you anymore" The words just fell out. I could hear your heart breaking And for second I had doubt "I have to go," you said But I made you stay I couldn't leave you like that Had to work it out some way Your infinite anger unleashed My tears began to fall You talked of someone to kill And suddenly I didn't want to live at all. and a quote that seems to just fit with this: "Last night I prayed the Lord my soul to keep, then I cried myself to sleep, so sure life wouldn't go on without you..." as always, comments welcomed |
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Aug 5 2004, 11:39 PM
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 Perfectly Flawed Group: Member Posts: 1,913 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 1,652 |
Oooh, I like it!
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Aug 5 2004, 11:47 PM
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 advanced newbie... S2 Group: Member Posts: 3,504 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 752 |
omg thass soo sad...
 wow you ahve skills, good job.
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Aug 5 2004, 11:49 PM
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 Future Mr. Kelly Clarkson Group: Member Posts: 1,268 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,552 |
o my word
thats good sara so sad but so good!!!!!!!!!!!!!! -brandon (700th post booyah!!!!!!!!) |
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Aug 5 2004, 11:58 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 646 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 30,847 |
aww thanks you guys. cBers are so sweet
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Aug 5 2004, 11:58 PM
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 Change Gon Come Group: Member Posts: 2,286 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,822 |
ooo..dat is good!
very sad.. |
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Aug 6 2004, 12:01 AM
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*hears his heart break*
That's okay, little buddy. I'll go get some band-aid to mend you. Good poem, Sara. - Chinkieeyedpnoi |
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Aug 6 2004, 01:02 AM
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 *aSh* =] Group: Member Posts: 2,075 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 15,101 |
Thats really good!
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Aug 6 2004, 05:46 AM
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 life is short...and so am i.. Group: Member Posts: 176 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 32,316 |
that was great. you're really talented at getting emotion through to us simpleton readers.
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Aug 6 2004, 11:49 AM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 646 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 30,847 |
 wow thank you guys so much for your comments. it really helps me to write better when i know people actually get what i'm saying and like it =)
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Aug 6 2004, 01:40 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,384 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 37,337 |
wow such a good poem... *tear drops*
anyways.. keep writing!!! |
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Aug 6 2004, 08:34 PM
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 dizzy me up. Group: Member Posts: 3,191 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 11,139 |
i really like the quote..
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Aug 8 2004, 02:08 AM
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Brie Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 10,172 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,548 |
YAY, SARA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
*hugs* That was awesome! 
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