poem, about my bf (well X now) |
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 Jul 28 2004, 09:07 PM
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 Roses are red so r my cheeks!  Group: Member Posts: 136 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,115  |
I am not really a poet but I was having feelings, and I tried to turn it into a poem so here it goes:
I think about you I dream about you What do you do? When I am with you, I am Happy and having fun. When I am not with you, I am sad and want to run. I would kiss you But, I dont want to miss you. would you break my heart? I cant even imagion that, oh and do u think I am fat? Would you be truthfull and say, what you dont like about me? Then set me free? Do you just luv me or, Do you love me like a fat kid loves cake? yah not really a big deal but w/e its my first poem ever sorri if u hate it 
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Jul 29 2004, 01:42 AM
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 Aww! ^___^ Group: Member Posts: 184 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,645 |
Aww it's not that bad. You just need to edit some grammar and spelling. And that "a fat kids love cake" well that's not really your quote but oh well. Good job for a beginner though!
If you need any help, just PM me and I'll be there to help you! -hEaRt <3 |
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