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 Jul 26 2004, 09:57 AM
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 who again?  Group: Member Posts: 555 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 31,458  |
Everything crashing down, no wonder im in such pain.
my days are more lonely, i take that in vain. I dont have the heart to go on anymore, my heart gave in. it doesnt have enough power to go on, if it does its a sin. Love crushed me once, should i love again? Does it even matter? all of this depends. I hope she likes me, we were meant to be. but through her eyes, i dont think she see's. I wish i can tell her, but im too shy. everynight i look at the stars and wish, wishing she was my girl...i cry. but i hope and pray, that one day she will see. how me and her were forever ment to be. heh, i have plenty more, give me some opinions ya guys. If the commentz are any good i'll post more. anyways hope ya enjoy 
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Jul 26 2004, 10:25 AM
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 Kermit the frog = <3 Group: Member Posts: 2,315 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 15,215 |
aww. that was nice.
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Jul 26 2004, 02:07 PM
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 WUT THA DUCK? Group: Member Posts: 3,950 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 14,138 |
ooo i love it!!!! great with ryhming!!! nice flow!!!
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Jul 26 2004, 03:42 PM
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 i`m in love & always will be Group: Member Posts: 1,138 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 12,769 |
aww i love that <3 keep up the good work
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Jul 26 2004, 03:48 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 80 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 31,071 |
I like the flow and the message itself. The rhyming kinda destracted me..I think it would be better without the AB rhyming.
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Jul 28 2004, 05:41 AM
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 Aww! ^___^ Group: Member Posts: 184 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,645 |
I love it!! write more!!
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Aug 8 2004, 11:07 PM
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Andrew!
You're so talented. =) Aww...this one is good. =P |
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Aug 8 2004, 11:11 PM
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 [p][E][r][F][e][C][T][L][y] [i][N][S][a][N][e] Group: Member Posts: 35 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,206 |
THAS SHOO CUTEEEE!!!!!!!!
 YOU DESSERVE A COOKIE!  But you're the cookie man so get one yourself!.. lol.. TOODLES!
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Aug 9 2004, 12:37 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,384 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 37,337 |
great work wit the rhyming...
i guess its one of those poems that naturally flow very smoothly good job! |
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Aug 9 2004, 07:52 AM
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 Ah, mon Dieu ! Group: Member Posts: 2,274 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,587 |
love the rhymes... i like it.
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