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Its Crazy How A Girl Can Affect A Guy.
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post Jul 23 2004, 06:02 PM
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Ok well I have no Idea what to call this. Maybe Its A Long non rhyming Poem, Maybe Its A Story, Maybe Its Just life..... I Dont Know, But I wrote this just now, it was all from the top of my head no brainstorming or nothing It just naturally came out, so sorry if the punctuation, and spelling and grammar are not perfect, but I wrote this just in case someone is bored and wants something to read. at the same time its so you girls can see just how much a you can affect a guy lol. By the way sorry its not the most perfect story and I left alto of details out, but I was trying to rush it lol. if you dont like the story then oh well im sorry to have wasted your time :(.








Nothing Without Her... By Emmanuel Morales (ME) lol.


Its crazy, he just lays on his bed with his hands on his head looking up at his ceiling wondering, thinking, guessing, how is she doing, what can she be doing, does she even know that while she’s with the other guy Chris is just depressed in his room thinking about her? Chances are she doesn’t know, why? Because she is too busy in the other guys arms.

He goes crazy at the fact that right now she can be doing something sexual with a guy who probably doesn’t care 1/1000000 th of what HE cares for her, the more he thinks about it, the more he cries, the more he cries the crazier he goes, the crazier he goes just leads him to see that maybe love is bullcrap , and that maybe no matter how great of a person you are, your other half can leave you at any given moment for no reason. He gets scared at the thought that no matter how great you treat a girl she can just walk out on you.

He gets out his bed in tears and stretches for another day, knowing that it’s another day that he doesn’t get to see her smile any more, another day that his fingers can not feel her hair, and he cries harder and it hurts him, so now he’s breathing harder , he knows that right now all those pet names she used to call him, are not his any more, that now she’s using them on him , his legs feel weak so he goes up against the wall just clueless, as to how the hell can a girl be so important that now his whole life is messed up.

He is shocked to see he can’t breathe without her, his hands tremble, his family at home knows something is wrong, but he has too much pride to admit to tell them, so lots of thoughts run through his head right now…

He thinks about every stuffed animal he bought her, he thought about all the money he spent on getting her gifts just because he thought her smile was worth it, he remembers all the nights he would cuddle with her too watch a movie, all the times he made her smile by saying something funny, the times he would console her when she felt ugly. He remembers watching her favorite tv shows when shes gone just so he can feel closer to her. His friends would try to introduce him to other girls but he didn’t care much for it, he already knew he found his princess, his queen.

He takes a deep breath and wipes his tears.. …..

But they come back down when he remembers all the talks of FUTURE KIDS, and all the talks of how their future home would be, and all the great vacations they would take together in the future. He remembers how at one time he felt so sure she was the one, that’s it his life was complete she was his other half…..

Cries harder.

She has his dream come true, and it hurts him to know that another guy took his dream, another guy is using his his soulmate. He knows that the other guy has like 3 more gf’s and he’s told her that. But hell, she just wont believe him and thinks hes just jealous, so it hurts him even more knowing that he loves her soo much and that another guy is just using her.

It hurts him to know that the girl he treated like a queen, is not being treated like a slut.

*cries in a angry way*

He decides to sit down on the floor and write her a letter, his tear drops are falling on that letter, but he decides to keep on, he tells her how he feels and how he misses her, he closes the envelope… he walks towards her block and pays a little kid to go take her the envelope, the kid takes the envelope, while the guy is still crying , the kid leaves….

He stays in the corner of the block but the girl doesn’t see him, she just looks at the kid who gave her the letter, and the kid runs away,
She looks at the letter and throws it on the floor, the guy sees this, but she doesn’t know hes looking , he gets hearbroken and he knows he will not get her back, he starts getting a lot of toughts.

…………….

She hears a big car crash and runs to the corner of her block to see what happened. When she looks she sees its him under the wheel of a car, theres people all over looking at the scene, she stays speechless, she can not believe her eyes……

she runs back to her block and picks up the letter she threw away in the floor, she decides to read it, at the end of the letter it says “if anyone had to hurt me im glad it was you”

She starts crying, she starts thinking about all the times she did him wrong, she tries to run back to the scene in hopes of him somehow still being alive even thought she knows he’s dead, but she atleast wants to make sure he can hear her out, now she wants to apologize , she keeps running towards the scene, and she gets 2 big surprises, one she sees the paramedics putting him in a body bag, and surprise number to when she looks to her left she sees her new boyfriend cuddling with another girl……
 
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post Jul 23 2004, 06:06 PM
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by the way im new to CB, so if this story is similar to anyone elses writing im so sorry, but to be fair, I have not read anyones stories or poems yet, I will do so now.
 
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post Jul 23 2004, 06:06 PM
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got bored so i read it...one word...woooooooo......who said..guys dont show their emotions...nice job..lol

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post Jul 23 2004, 06:07 PM
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lol thanks lol
 
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post Jul 23 2004, 06:12 PM
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hey if any of u took time to read this please leave feedback, good or bad, but i dont mind feedback lol
 
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post Jul 23 2004, 06:13 PM
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What the fack.
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Wow that was deep. cry.gif Love is beautiful when it lasts, but when it's gone, it's tragic. You're good with writing.
 
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post Jul 23 2004, 06:18 PM
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thanks lol, but hey if any of you think the story sucks, dont be afraid to say so lol
 
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post Jul 23 2004, 07:06 PM
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whoa that is such an awesome story!!!!! happy.gif
it made me go awwww. lOL. nice job.

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post Jul 23 2004, 07:07 PM
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haha thanks lol
 
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post Jul 23 2004, 07:09 PM
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WOWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW.


-speechless-

*claps*
Good job, I like it :D
 
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post Jul 23 2004, 07:12 PM
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thanks im appreciating the feedback :), honestly aslong as one person liked it, or atleast got the message, then my job has been done lol "WOW HOW CHEESY DID THAT JUST SOUND LOL"
 
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post Jul 23 2004, 09:01 PM
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that was awesome. i think my jaw hit the desk lol i love your story. good job.
 
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post Jul 23 2004, 09:07 PM
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wow how sad!! but its a great story!!!! happy.gif
 
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post Jul 23 2004, 09:09 PM
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hey pplz thanks for taking time to read it, more feedback is always welcome lol
 
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post Jul 23 2004, 09:46 PM
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wow thats really good!!!! i love it! great job!
By the way, Im Ashley =]
 
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post Jul 23 2004, 09:55 PM
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thanks :)
 
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post Jul 23 2004, 09:58 PM
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Man bro.... Im feelin ya on that one... but like the saying goes..."Its a shame that a girl can make a guy cry...Just because she can"
 
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post Jul 23 2004, 10:12 PM
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im with u bro, thats my whole point, they have that power over us lol.
 
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post Jul 23 2004, 11:36 PM
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hey i sent the story to my boyfriend. his response:
"wow...whomever he is he has my utmost respect as a writer. that was really a good story."
 
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post Jul 23 2004, 11:39 PM
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tell your boyfriend I said thanks :)
 
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post Jul 23 2004, 11:52 PM
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woah! its long...but good..lolz
 
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post Jul 24 2004, 12:29 AM
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lol thanks
 
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post Jul 24 2004, 01:04 AM
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.......................................whoa.....................................
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that there, was deep......earlier today (which was the 23rd cuz its like 1am my time now on the 24th) I checked out your site....and I had a feeling that you were a good writing, but that......Fantastic Job. biggrin.gif

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post Jul 24 2004, 01:19 AM
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thanks so much :), and for taking the time to read it.
 
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post Jul 24 2004, 01:28 AM
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Its ReAllY sweet.. i almost cried when i read it. Gd jOb~
 

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