School Flyer, Client From School Rating Options

[deteam]

Club at school wanted me to make them a flyer.....

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thoughts to fix it up

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[brooklyneast05]

what's your reasoning behind what you did? why did you pick these colors, theses brushes, font, what made you use a polaroid style

[deteam]

what's your reasoning behind what you did? why did you pick these colors, theses brushes, font, what made you use a polaroid style

its what they asked for .... im changing the fonts though, people say this one is hard 2 read, any suggestions?

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[brooklyneast05]

they told you to do exactly every single thing on this poster?

[deteam]

Sakura ...Check
Fireworks...Check
Info...Check
Photo to be Included...Check
Photo In Polaroid...Check

any more questions?

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[none345678]

That just plain out sucks. There doesn't seem to be any rhyme or reason for anything. Look at other people's flyers for inspiration and ideas. Flyers can be a hard thing to do if you don't know what you are doing. And you don't know what you're doing.

and Polaroid = almost always a bad idea. so good luck with that

[brooklyneast05]

what abbey said.

Sakura ...Check
Fireworks...Check
Info...Check
Photo to be Included...Check
Photo In Polaroid...Check

any more questions?

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all your stuff is like this though. you need to think more about design. just because they tell you what they want doesn't mean you slap it all together and you're good to go. that's not designing, that's completing a laundry list. there is a difference between designing and being able to use photoshop. there should be reasons behind what you do, that's what sets you apart.

clients are stupid, they don't know what they really want, only what they think they want but they don't have the vision to be able to see what it would look like.

the photo is the most interesting part of the whole poster, and should be the eye catcher (apart from the heading) but it's small and not a focal point hardly at all. a small photo in a polaroid is a dumb idea for a flyer usually. it just doesn't make any sense when you are talking about using imagery to catch someones eye.

the font doesn't read good like you said but still...just listing it out and hitting center. that's so boring and unappealing. your type hierarchy sucks too. your credit at the bottom is close to the same font size as the real information. it should never be that way. the information on the poster is way more important than your own credit. the header text that tells you what the hell this isn't' isn't dominate or drastically more focal.

your color palette is iffy here too, though not as bad as the valentines poster. red and weird peachy orangy...that just doesn't look good together.


oh yeah and the info is written badly too. there are too many extra words that aren't necessary. it could say games, free food, singing, dancing, fashion show and mean the same thing as being all wordy and saying shit like "as well as a fashion show". that's a 6 word phrase that can be communicated in two, fashion show.


and more. i duno, just think about what you're trying to say before you start designing and you will be way better off.

[Tomates]

That just plain out sucks. There doesn't seem to be any rhyme or reason for anything. Look at other people's flyers for inspiration and ideas. Flyers can be a hard thing to do if you don't know what you are doing. And you don't know what you're doing.

and Polaroid = almost always a bad idea. so good luck with that

He said its what they wanted if you were reading and paying attention.

I like the concept of it. The second one is better in my opinion. Also i would possibly make the polaroid a bit bigger. There's a lot of empty space by the polaroid. Maybe add a cherry blossom with flowers on it?

And you guys i would say it sucks...thats a bit harsh. He's only trying.

[brooklyneast05]

the second is worse. look how close the type gets to each side of the poster. the space you don't use is as important as the space you do. it's over crowded. learn how to hit the enter key

also once again, information hierarchy. are the details as important as the date and time? no

[brooklyneast05]

He said its what they wanted if you were reading and paying attention.

I like the concept of it. The second one is better in my opinion. Also i would possibly make the polaroid a bit bigger. There's a lot of empty space by the polaroid. Maybe add a cherry blossom with flowers on it?

And you guys i would say it sucks...thats a bit harsh. He's only trying.

he asked for critique. that's what i'm giving.

[deteam]

he asked for critique. that's what i'm giving.

haha thanks im trying to fix it up now ...



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[deteam]

updated feedback please

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[creole]

what do the japanese letters stand for?

[deteam]

what do the japanese letters stand for?

your asking me ? do i look japanese

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[creole]

Uhh.. who else is making the project?
I was hoping you would know instead of putting those letters without a reason? You never know if you have Japanese people reading this at your school. LOL

[Tomates]

I like the newest version. However i still like the font you used for the second one better. At least where you listed the time, date, and place.

[deteam]

Uhh.. who else is making the project?
I was hoping you would know instead of putting those letters without a reason? You never know if you have Japanese people reading this at your school. LOL

lmao there is a 100% chance of that ... its nothing bad though, just the typical "soul" "love" "happiness" etc. i could check the font if really necessary since the definitions came with the set lol

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[Eww]

i kind of dont like how everything is perfectly aligned.
you could tilt the polaroid picture
i feel like it's really like.. dull and formated.
you have a the title on top, a picture right underneath, and some info right under.
switch it up to make it look interesting.

[deteam]

i kind of dont like how everything is perfectly aligned.
you could tilt the polaroid picture
i feel like it's really like.. dull and formated.
you have a the title on top, a picture right underneath, and some info right under.
switch it up to make it look interesting.

thanks 4 the input

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