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 Aug 23 2009, 05:27 PM
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 Senior Member  Group: Human Posts: 525 Joined: Nov 2008 Member No: 695,913  |
 What to fix ? Stay Up -1- Subliminal **EDIT**  **EDIT2**  **EDIT3**  **EDIT4**  Stay Up -1- Subliminal
Reason for edit: Posts merged -Kristina/technicolour
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Aug 23 2009, 11:26 PM
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 show me a garden thats bursting to life Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 12,303 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 115,987 |
For one, please don't double post. Just use the edit button. Two, the font is just all wrong. I would change the font. And if you want the scroll to look authentic, change the font on the scroll to a dark brown and set that layer to Multiply, that way some of the texture of the paper will appear on the script.
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Aug 23 2009, 11:27 PM
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 사랑해 ~ 我愛你 ♥ Group: Design Staff Posts: 825 Joined: Jan 2007 Member No: 492,587 |
Somehow, the hand doesn't look like it's coming from behind the parchment. There's no shadow on the paper from the hand.
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Aug 23 2009, 11:33 PM
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Senior Member Group: Human Posts: 525 Joined: Nov 2008 Member No: 695,913 |
finally some advice
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Aug 23 2009, 11:36 PM
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show me a garden thats bursting to life Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 12,303 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 115,987 |
Yeah, now that I take a look at it more, Gabrielle is right and uh, the white shading around the hand on the parchment..that really doesn't look right.
You wanted advice... 
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Aug 23 2009, 11:49 PM
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 kthxbai Group: Official Designer Posts: 2,832 Joined: Feb 2008 Member No: 621,203 |
Why does it say subliminal GFX all over it?
also, the font on the parchment looks like it's floating... I assume you wanted it to look like it was written there. |
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Aug 23 2009, 11:55 PM
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Senior Member Group: Human Posts: 525 Joined: Nov 2008 Member No: 695,913 |
QUOTE(emberfly @ Aug 24 2009, 12:49 AM)  Why does it say subliminal GFX all over it? also, the font on the parchment looks like it's floating... I assume you wanted it to look like it was written there. thats my tag until i get it done and i posted up your stuff with a shadow and font change advice about the shadow please!!!! Stay Up -1- Subliminal |
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Aug 23 2009, 11:58 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,237 Joined: May 2008 Member No: 648,123 |
Besides the text on the parchment, I think the biggest issue is the hand. It's not so much a lack of shadow on the paper as it is a lack of shadows and highlights on the hand itself. The ball it's holding looks like it'd be giving off one hell of a glow, so the skin closest to the ball should be much brighter than the skin on the back of the fingers. You may even want to distort the tips of the fingers a very small bit to give the impression that it's holding the ball (try holding a ball in your own hand; the contact areas of your skin will squish a little).
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Aug 24 2009, 12:00 AM
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Senior Member Group: Human Posts: 525 Joined: Nov 2008 Member No: 695,913 |
QUOTE(fixtatik @ Aug 24 2009, 12:58 AM) Besides the text on the parchment, I think the biggest issue is the hand. It's not so much a lack of shadow on the paper as it is a lack of shadows and highlights on the hand itself. The ball it's holding looks like it'd be giving off one hell of a glow, so the skin closest to the ball should be much brighter than the skin on the back of the fingers. You may even want to distort the tips of the fingers a very small bit to give the impression that it's holding the ball (try holding a ball in your own hand; the contact areas of your skin will squish a little). any advice on how exactly to go about doing this ?  Stay Up -1- Subliminal |
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Aug 24 2009, 12:01 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Administrator Posts: 8,629 Joined: Jan 2007 Member No: 498,468 |
I think your edit looks better but there's something still off about the hand.
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Aug 24 2009, 12:03 AM
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Senior Member Group: Human Posts: 525 Joined: Nov 2008 Member No: 695,913 |
QUOTE(manny-the-dino @ Aug 24 2009, 01:01 AM) I think your edit looks better but there's something still off about the hand. does the shadow at least look right ? or wrong angle ? Stay Up -1- Subliminal |
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Aug 24 2009, 12:08 AM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,237 Joined: May 2008 Member No: 648,123 |
QUOTE(deteam @ Aug 24 2009, 01:00 AM) any advice on how exactly to go about doing this ? The side facing the ball looks fine, so you just need to lightly burn the back of the hand. For squishing the skin, try using the liquify tool (if you're using Photoshop), very gently. After that, add in some shadows around where you distorted to give it some dimension so it doesn't just look like you sliced off some skin. |
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Aug 24 2009, 12:09 AM
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Senior Member Group: Administrator Posts: 8,629 Joined: Jan 2007 Member No: 498,468 |
I think the angle is right but I dk, I can't point out what's weird about the shadow itself :/
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Aug 24 2009, 12:14 AM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,237 Joined: May 2008 Member No: 648,123 |
^ It's the tips of the fingers. They have highlights but in the direction they're facing, there's no light source to give them a highlight in that spot.
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Aug 24 2009, 12:22 AM
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Senior Member Group: Human Posts: 525 Joined: Nov 2008 Member No: 695,913 |
updated with burned hand
Stay Up -1- Subliminal I updated this again with some blood/scratches that the client requested, what do you guys think >? . . let me know also hes requesting a text that appears burned into the paper . . anybody got nay tutorials lol Stay Up -1- Subliminal
Reason for edit: Please use the Edit button instead of double-posting. - Mike
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Aug 24 2009, 11:58 AM
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 Treasure Pleasure Group: Head Staff Posts: 11,193 Joined: Oct 2005 Member No: 281,127 |
Posts merged.
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Aug 24 2009, 12:00 PM
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 poison Group: Official Member Posts: 4,806 Joined: Mar 2008 Member No: 629,020 |
I like edit 2 the best so far.
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Aug 24 2009, 12:10 PM
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 Pocketful of Sunshine Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,690 Joined: Nov 2005 Member No: 289,004 |
The burned hand is ugly and looks fake. I also think you could have made the image blend in more with the scroll better.
LOL, ILY. 
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Aug 24 2009, 12:41 PM
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Senior Member Group: Human Posts: 525 Joined: Nov 2008 Member No: 695,913 |
um editing my post will not bump this thread up 2 the top now will it
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Aug 24 2009, 12:45 PM
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사랑해 ~ 我愛你 ♥ Group: Design Staff Posts: 825 Joined: Jan 2007 Member No: 492,587 |
If your topic is interesting enough, it will be bumped to the top. Just be patient.
There's still something about the hand that seems fake. It seems kinda plump and healthy looking despite all the blood that's supposed to be coming off of it. I don't know. The blood seems kind... pasted on. Lmao. |
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Aug 24 2009, 01:16 PM
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Senior Member Group: Human Posts: 525 Joined: Nov 2008 Member No: 695,913 |
wheres my warning level @ and how many double posts b4 i reach 100 ?
and @ ellectricity. . . im working on the blood now ill post up a edited version when im done . . . and @ idecay . . .thats what the client wants, and what other people on here also recommended to do . . . so thanks for nothing. Stay Up -1- Subliminal |
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Aug 24 2009, 01:27 PM
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Pocketful of Sunshine Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,690 Joined: Nov 2005 Member No: 289,004 |
QUOTE(deteam @ Aug 24 2009, 11:16 AM) wheres my warning level @ and how many double posts b4 i reach 100 ? and @ ellectricity. . . im working on the blood now ill post up a edited version when im done . . . and @ idecay . . .thats what the client wants, and what other people on here also recommended to do . . . so thanks for nothing. Stay Up -1- Subliminal Underneath your member info crap.  There is no definite number, but I hope you reach it soon. And no, they did not say that. I said it could have blended in better and nobody mentioned that. Thanks for humoring me. |
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Aug 24 2009, 02:13 PM
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Senior Member Group: Human Posts: 525 Joined: Nov 2008 Member No: 695,913 |
QUOTE(iDecay @ Aug 24 2009, 01:10 PM) The burned hand is ugly and looks fake. I also think you could have made the image blend in more with the scroll better. LOL, ILY. QUOTE(fixtatik @ Aug 24 2009, 01:08 AM) The side facing the ball looks fine, so you just need to lightly burn the back of the hand. im pretty sure they already suggested to me that i burn the hand . . Edit: Bumped a new blood version up there Stay Up -1- Subliminal |
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Aug 24 2009, 02:21 PM
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사랑해 ~ 我愛你 ♥ Group: Design Staff Posts: 825 Joined: Jan 2007 Member No: 492,587 |
QUOTE(deteam @ Aug 24 2009, 12:13 PM) im pretty sure they already suggested to me that i burn the hand . . Stay Up -1- Subliminal She probably just saying the burns don't look as real as they could be. Don't take things personally, just keep working on your piece. |
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Aug 24 2009, 02:25 PM
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Senior Member Group: Human Posts: 525 Joined: Nov 2008 Member No: 695,913 |
QUOTE(elletricity @ Aug 24 2009, 03:21 PM) She probably just saying the burns don't look as real as they could be. Don't take things personally, just keep working on your piece. i can understand constructive criticism, but when all she does is come in here and tell me how bad the design looks and leaves with out leaving any advice on how 2 fix its just disrespectful. If you going to critique my work at least give advice on how 2 fix things and no hate i love you all  lolEDIT: there's a new blood version up as well as i added some stuff to the paper to make it look more worn Give advice Stay Up -1- Subliminal |
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